Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In modern times, competition is one of the crucial thing in every field of life. Some individual believe that competition has some benefits in every sector such as at work, at school and in daily life, however other believe that cooperativeness is outweighs competition by many ways. I agree with the views that cooperativeness has more benefits than competing with each other.

Generally speaking, there are a huge reasons for the favour of competative world is because of competition resourses are limited. Perhaps there are the main reasons of conpetition is that anyone can gain economically stable position if he or she work proparly. For example, the world is competative without compete with each other the little resourse we cannot use.

By contrast, other arguements about the cooperativeness that it is an important style of life. In society poor and rich people all live together. Not only the rich people help poor, but poor people also indirectly help wealthy people. Without cooperation we cannot live in this society because we are social animal, we need communication as well as cooperation in every step of life. For example, farmer grow rice for us and we purchase rice from them. If they do not grow rice how can we get it as well as if we do not buy it, it also effects. I believe that people we live in a society where we cooperate each other, without it we cannot survive a single day.

In conclusion, the cooperation is crucial than competition, sometimes competition is needed but we always fond of cooperation. If we cooperate each other, life will be easy for us.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both competition and cooperation and state a clear preference for cooperation, especially in the introduction and conclusion. The paragraph on competition gives a relevant reason—limited resources and the possibility of gaining a stable position—but the explanation and example are difficult to follow, so this view is only partly developed. Your cooperation paragraph is more relevant and includes the farmer-and-rice example, though it mainly illustrates interdependence rather than fully explaining why cooperation is preferable in work, school, and daily life. To strengthen the response, develop each side with a clearer chain of reasoning and a specific example, then explain how the example supports your position. The response addresses the task, but some ideas remain limited or unclear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Transitions such as “By contrast” and “In conclusion” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the competition paragraph moves from limited resources to economic stability and then to an unclear example. Some linking phrases are also awkward or repetitive, and references such as “it” in the rice example are not always precise. Organise each body paragraph around one main point, explain it in sequence, and use clear references and linking expressions. This would make the overall organisation easier to follow and reduce the sense of disconnected ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “competition,” “cooperation,” “economically stable position,” and “social animal.” These choices show an attempt to discuss abstract ideas, but the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors make parts of the message difficult to understand. Examples include “competative,” “resourses,” and “cooperativeness is outweighs competition.” Some phrases, such as “the little resourse we cannot use,” do not express the intended meaning clearly. Focus on accurate topic vocabulary and natural combinations rather than using more complicated forms. Proofreading spelling and checking collocations would make your ideas clearer and more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including the “Not only … but …” construction and conditional forms such as “If they do not grow rice…”. However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence construction occur throughout. For example, “Some individual believe” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “cooperativeness is outweighs competition” combines incompatible verb forms. The sentence beginning “For example, the world is…” is also difficult to parse because its clauses are not connected clearly. Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and conditionals. Careful checking of agreement and verb forms will improve readability.

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