Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many individuals believe that competition at work, in educational field and in a everyday life is a good thing. Others argue that we should try to cooperate more with each other, rather than competing against each other. Both statements are very valid but in my point of view, competition in every field of live give more accurate drawbacks.

Firstly, competition in different fields has many advantages, one major advantages is that people give all their concentration on their jobs and work doing very properly. For example, in schools, universities and colleges teacher take test in their class, students attempt the test and give their hundred percent. In the result, teacher check test and accounce result. They give reward test topper in the form of money or trophy. In this way, other students gain motivation and get ready for the next test and improve their study very easily. Furthermore, many companies give some bounses at the end of year who employ work hard all year and punctual with their work.

Secondly, most people argue that we should cooperate with each other, rather than competing against each other because if competition has advantages and also has some disadvantages, one of the major disadvantages is that every individual don't have same mind set some people pick all skills and information and some take a lot of time when these type of people don't competing other people than they give up from their all activities. So, should should cooperate with each other work equally.

Finaly, in my opinion, competition at work, at school and other fields of life has more drawbacks rather than other but we should cooperate with each other.

In conclusion, both prospectives has many advantages and disadvatages but competition at workplace and educational field effect very positivlly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides by describing possible benefits of competition in education and employment, then arguing that cooperation can help people who progress at different speeds. However, the position is not consistently clear: the introduction says competition brings “more accurate drawbacks,” the opinion paragraph says it has “more drawbacks,” while the conclusion claims it affects education and work “very positively.” These statements conflict, so the reader cannot identify your final view with confidence. The supporting ideas are also limited or unclear. The example of rewards motivating students is relevant, but the cooperation point needs a specific explanation of how working together helps people, and the disadvantages of competition need fuller development. State one clear position and support each view with a developed example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

Your response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs beginning “Firstly” and “Secondly,” and a conclusion. These markers help the reader see that you are discussing both views. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the second body paragraph moves from differences in people’s abilities to people giving up, then to a brief recommendation to cooperate without clearly explaining the links. The conclusion also repeats both sides but does not resolve the conflicting position stated earlier. Some linking phrases, such as “because if” and “In the result,” are awkward or unclear, and “should should” is repeated. Organise each body paragraph around one main point, explain it step by step, and use clear references and transitions rather than relying mainly on sequence markers.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the general discussion, including “competition,” “cooperate,” “motivation,” “reward,” and “disadvantages.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “punctual with their work.” However, the range is limited and several word choices, collocations, and spelling errors make parts of the response difficult to interpret. For example, “accurate drawbacks” does not express a clear meaning, “give their hundred percent” is unnatural, and “teacher take test” is imprecise. Spelling errors such as “accounce,” “bounses,” and “prospectives” also reduce accuracy. Build a bank of natural phrases for discussing incentives, teamwork, and outcomes, and check spelling and word forms during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional structure in “if competition has advantages and also has some disadvantages.” However, complex sentences are often difficult to follow because of frequent errors in agreement, articles, plurals, and sentence construction. Examples include “competition … give,” “one major advantages,” “teacher take test,” and “every individual don't have same mind set.” The sentence beginning “So, should should cooperate” is incomplete and contains a repeated word. These errors sometimes make the intended relationships between ideas unclear. Practise checking each sentence for a clear subject and verb, then review singular and plural agreement and article use. Shorter, accurately controlled sentences would help before you add more complex structures.

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