Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

some people think that competiton is good things at work,school and daily life.and some others people argue that we should try to cooperate more rathan than competition with each other.

in competition,which is assist our dedication to win this competiton.you can't very well preparation without any competition.when you attend any competition with your friends or collegue then you can try your best to win this.it is an important for us because it helps our daily life work and study can do frequently.also its maintain our daily life routine.also it learn some new things that is improve our knowledge.regular competition makes a men perfect for doing anything accurately and quickly.sometimes competition gives motivation when we win any competition.its helps to win other competition.so this is positive things for us,

on the other hand,many people believe that cooperate is helpful for us rather than any competition.it is logical because sometimes,competition destroy our relation.people get hate this oposite person just only win the competition.it is not good human behavior.we should cooperate with other person that the work or study we can finish quickly.sometimes,cooperate made our work and study easily and also deep connect our relation bonding.any hard work and study solve easily without hasitation just for cooperate.it is also reduce our jelous.

compition is good things for everyone,because it is help to improve our dedication.but it is also create some problems.for example,it make distance our relationship.every people try to win this competition.no one can help others peoples.so,i think cooperate is good rather than competition.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both competition and cooperation and give a clear final preference for cooperation, so the response addresses the main parts of the prompt. The competition paragraph offers relevant benefits, such as motivation and improving dedication, while the cooperation paragraph explains that rivalry can damage relationships and that working together can make tasks easier. However, these points are mostly asserted rather than explained with specific examples or developed reasoning. The opening also largely repeats the question, and the conclusion introduces the idea that competition can create problems without fully resolving how its benefits should be balanced against cooperation. Develop fewer points in more depth and support them with a concrete example to make your position more convincing and consistently clear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. The contrast marker “on the other hand” helps signal the shift to cooperation, and the final paragraph states your preference. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several ideas are added in a list-like way, such as competition improving dedication, routine, knowledge, and accuracy. Repeated use of “also” and “sometimes” makes linking mechanical, while references such as “this” and “it” are not always clear. Use clearer topic sentences, group related points, and connect each explanation directly to the claim it supports. This would make the argument easier to follow without changing its basic organisation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small set of relevant terms, including “competition,” “cooperate,” “motivation,” and “relationship,” which allows the reader to identify the main ideas. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning unclear. For example, “competition destroy our relation” and “deep connect our relation bonding” do not express the intended ideas naturally; “jealousy” is also misspelled as “jelous.” Repetition of “competition,” “good,” and “help” further restricts precision. Build a wider set of topic vocabulary and learn common collocations, such as “damage relationships,” “strengthen bonds,” and “encourage people to improve.” Check spelling and word forms during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentence patterns, including explanations with “because” and contrasts introduced by “on the other hand,” but most sentences rely on simple structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are often faulty. For example, “when you attend any competition with your friends or collegue then you can try your best to win this” has an unclear structure, while “it helps our daily life work and study can do frequently” does not form a clear grammatical relationship between its clauses. Subject–verb agreement and verb forms are also inconsistent, as in “competition destroy” and “cooperate made.” Sentence boundaries and capitalization need attention as well. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using controlled subordinate clauses and check agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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