Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I agree with both statement competition at work, school and in daily life is a good thing whereas we should try to cooperate more rather than competition against each other . both views have good and bad effect . i will discuss in detail each views.

Firstly i discussed first statment . I partially agree this statement if the coompition at work scool or in daily its have some adventages that if the competition then people focus on the goals and or moviate from the other people who win all thing in life than they struggles a lot in life and acthieve the goal do and died which is the postive thing . but if the competition has not in life. they do not perform well.

The disadventage is that if the people do not achieve the sccess in the life we can see the stress in their life becuase evey one can not handle the situation in easy way and some people commite the sucide becuase they can not face the disculity in the life.

some student do not perfume well and have the anixety in their life and these issues can create the health problem in the body which have bad effect in overall life

If i talk about the other statement we should cooperate other people instead of compeition with each other becuase if we do not compete then people have no stress in life and no worries in the life and they feel self confident rather than degrade their yourself .

In conclusion competition is important at school work or daily life for better perfomers but cooperative envirnment is more benefical for society because if the people are happy then no worry or disappointment in their life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the question and give a position: competition can motivate people, while cooperation can create a happier environment. The examples of goal-setting and stress or anxiety are relevant, and the conclusion restates your preference for cooperation. However, the discussion is only partial: the cooperation view receives much less explanation, and the claim that people have “no stress” if they do not compete is not sufficiently qualified or supported. Your opening also says you agree with both statements without clearly explaining how you balance them. Develop each view with a specific example and make your overall position consistent throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. Signposts such as “Firstly,” “If i talk about the other statement,” and “In conclusion” help indicate the stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from motivation to achievement and then to suicide and health problems without clear links. Some connections are repetitive or unclear, and the cooperation paragraph is too brief to balance the discussion. Organise each body paragraph around one main point, explain it, and then give a relevant example; use clearer references to connect ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “competition,” “goals,” “stress,” “anxiety,” and “cooperative environment.” This gives the response a basic range for discussing the issue. However, spelling errors and inaccurate word forms are frequent, as in “coompition,” “adventages,” “perfomers,” and “benefical,” and some expressions are difficult to understand, such as “win all thing in life” and “degrade their yourself.” Repetition of “life” and “people” also limits precision. Build a reliable set of topic-related collocations and check spelling and word forms; for example, describe competition as motivating people to “strive for success” rather than using unclear phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to use both simple and more extended sentences, including clauses introduced by “if” and “because.” This shows an effort to explain causes and consequences. However, sentence structures are often faulty, and frequent errors can make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “I agree with both statement” has problems with agreement and number, while “if the competition then people focus on the goals” is an incomplete conditional construction. Verb forms and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “Firstly i discussed” and the long sentence beginning “the coompition at work.” Practise complete sentences, accurate subject–verb agreement, and controlled conditional forms; use full stops to separate ideas.

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