Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

People have conflicting point of views on how competition at work and school in daily life. while some argue that competition in daily life like school, work, is really crucial for human beigns, other opine that should be working together and help all kind off things are important for individual carrear. This essay will discuss both point of views and i will present my own prespective in the end. before reaching to a conclusion.

On the one hand, many people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a great thing for people. competition habbit built man perfect and person achieve all types of things in their whole life goals. For example; in the Delhi mostly high standars school give a tranning all students how to wins and makes plannings for achievies personals goals these types of trannings makes mens perfects and many people rich in few years also create a huge size of industries and factories. it is really crucial for individual.

On the other hand, some people argue that helping each other is really important rather than competing against each other. For example; In the Canada teaching in the schools those students helps all people also all kinds of helps like office help, road crossing help, best advice help, share meal, also work together in the hospitals all types of helps in addition parents also teachs there childern's helps any ones. this kind of habits can helps developes a outstanding community. I strongly believe that helping other people are always bests for all kinds of hummanities and built a strongs, lovely and carring society.

In conclusion, some individual say that competition is so important for good life. whereas other argue that helping other people is better its built a fantastic society. i support helping each other is so important.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both competition and cooperation and state a clear preference for helping others, especially in “I strongly believe that helping other people…” and the conclusion. The response therefore addresses the main parts of the prompt. However, the discussion is only partly developed: the competition paragraph makes broad claims about schools producing successful people and industries, but does not explain clearly how competition leads to these outcomes. The cooperation examples are also mostly a list of helpful actions rather than an explanation of their effects. The opening promises that your opinion will come “in the end,” although it appears in the body as well. To strengthen the response, explain each main reason and connect a specific example directly to it. (Fourteen words copied from the task prompt were not counted.)

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” help signal the change in viewpoint, and the final paragraph restates your position. However, progression within the body paragraphs is less clear because several examples are placed together without showing how they support the main point. For instance, the cooperation paragraph moves from school assistance to road crossing, meals, hospitals, and parenting in one long sequence. Some linking is mechanical, and the opening’s promise to give your opinion “in the end” does not match the opinion already stated in the body. Group related examples and use clearer links to explain cause and effect.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “competition,” “achieve,” “community,” and “society,” so the main ideas can generally be understood. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, such as “competition habbit built man perfect,” “all kinds of helps,” and “built a strongs, lovely and carring society.” Spelling and word-form errors, including “beigns,” “carrear,” and “prespective,” also make the writing less clear and controlled. Aim to learn topic-specific phrases as complete collocations, such as “foster cooperation” or “strive to achieve goals,” and check spelling and word forms during revision. This will make your meaning more precise and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the response includes some subordinate structures, such as “while some argue…” and “those students helps…”. However, control is limited: many sentences contain errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries. For example, “some people argue that helping each other is really important” is followed by a long sequence of loosely connected clauses, while “this kind of habits can helps developes” combines incorrect agreement and verb forms. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, including sentence openings such as “while” and “competition” after full stops. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Use full stops to separate examples and explanations.

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