Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Few populace consider that the competition at occupation, at academic institute, and their daily routine has a perfect things. While, on the other hand citizens perspective attempt to cooperate more, instead of competing against each other. From my perspective, cooperate more to each other because they help everyone as well share some experience together so, they really support your goal.

To begin with, individuals assert them the competition in studies, job as well as routine is a better way. They challenge each other for stand better position and also work hard and achieve this goal. For instance, Ali work hard and was goal for won this award. Moreover, populace in their life they aim goals due to they competition each other at every object. A good example is that, racer has competition other members so they aim goal to compete other people and get rank one.

Furthermore, On the other hand, people convince we help each other instead of compete to everyone. They really effective for our life because they support to everyone in bad situation as well as he get more knowledge for everybody. For example, the Ali go to group study, day by day he get more knowledge about study, job as well as daily life. In addition, when people cooperate each other so they really knowing well each other as well as gained love. For example, few individuals work together so they feelings changes for people.

In conclusion, I am totally agreed that the people who cooperate each other so they really effective for our life because this case even citizens supporting emotional as well as they really help in good advise and gained love to each other.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the discussion and state a clear preference for cooperation, especially in the opening and conclusion. The examples of competition in studying and racing, and cooperation through group study, are relevant to the topic. However, the discussion remains general and the supporting examples are not sufficiently explained: Ali’s award, for instance, is mentioned without showing how competition led to achievement. The benefits of cooperation are also repeated as support, knowledge and affection rather than developed into distinct reasons. To strengthen the response, explain the effects of each view and make your own position more fully reasoned, while keeping the discussion balanced.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the broad direction of the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and several points repeat rather than build on one another. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore,” and “In addition” are used, but sometimes mechanically; “Furthermore, On the other hand” also combines signals that do not fit together smoothly. Some references are unclear, as in “they support to everyone” and “this case.” Organise each body paragraph around one main reason, then explain and illustrate it, and use clearer references and transitions between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is sufficient to identify the main topic and express basic ideas, using words such as “competition,” “cooperate,” “support,” and “knowledge.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning awkward or difficult to follow. Examples include “Few populace,” “at occupation,” “a perfect things,” and “compete to everyone.” Repeated use of “people,” “goal,” and “really” also limits precision. Aim to learn common topic-specific combinations and use them accurately, such as “compete for a position” or “work collaboratively.” More precise vocabulary would help you explain the contrast between individual achievement and shared benefits without relying on repeated general terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “because” and “when,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, control is inconsistent, particularly in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “Ali work hard and was goal for won this award” contains several grammatical problems, while “the Ali go to group study” and “they really knowing well each other” are also difficult to process. Some sentences join clauses awkwardly, as in “when people cooperate each other so they really knowing well.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking subject–verb agreement and verb forms in each sentence.

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