Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people argue that the excessive challenges at workplace, educational institutions and peoples everyday life is the beneficial thing while other suggest that the individuals should try to adjust more, rather than fighting with one another. While this retail significant challenges and the long-term problems I partially agree with this view but it has its own drawbacks.

Admittedly, the advantages for competing each other in daily lives, has play an important role which is beneficial. For instance, students having competitions with thier batchmates has a good effect. They have this strength to not to lose and in the result it will help build their confidence to the completion of the tasks. But it has its own drawbacks. For instance, In coorporate lives, people start to have inquality problems; individuals that has certain ability to not know how to manage with others will lose confidence.

Furthermore, If everyone starts to manage with their partners in work places or other, it will lead to better more positive environment. It will also help in your personality; patience which is also one of the most important key in the professional life. I partially argree with this statement because the amount of challenges we faced results in cooperating more in daily lives. However, as compared to the first one the other one has its own pros and cons.

To sum it up, In both senerios poeple will eventually follow whatever their heart desires but in my point of view both situations are equal, both has their own challenges and outcomes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides by discussing competition among students and cooperation in workplaces, and you state that you “partially agree.” However, the position is not consistently clear: the opening refers to “significant challenges,” while the conclusion says both situations are “equal,” without explaining which approach you ultimately favour. Several ideas remain limited or unclear. For example, you say competition can build students’ confidence, but do not explain how this benefit compares with its possible harms. The workplace example about inequality and losing confidence is also difficult to follow. To strengthen the response, explain each view with a specific cause-and-effect example, then give a consistent opinion that directly answers the question throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic essay structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Paragraphs also broadly separate competition from cooperation, which gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, the overall progression is not clear because the discussion shifts between ideas without fully connecting them. For instance, the first body paragraph moves from students’ confidence to workplace inequality, while the second introduces patience and then returns to competition. Linking phrases such as “Furthermore” and “To sum it up” are present, but some transitions do not show the precise relationship between ideas. The conclusion repeats that both have pros and cons rather than drawing together the argument. Organise each paragraph around one main point and use clearer references and transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “competition,” “cooperate,” “confidence,” “professional life” and “environment.” There are also attempts at less common expressions, such as “long-term problems” and “personality.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning difficult to understand. For example, “excessive challenges” does not clearly express competition, and “retail significant challenges” appears to be an unsuitable phrase. Spelling errors such as “thier,” “coorporate,” “argree” and “senerios” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of topic phrases and check spelling; choose expressions that convey the intended idea directly rather than relying on unclear wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some complex sentence attempts, including clauses beginning with “While” and “because,” as well as examples introduced with “For instance.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement and punctuation. For example, “the advantages … has play” combines an incorrect subject–verb form with an incorrect verb construction, while “individuals that has” has faulty agreement. The sentence “They have this strength to not to lose” also shows problems with infinitive structure. Capitalisation after commas and full stops is inconsistent, and some sentences are difficult to parse because clauses are joined awkwardly. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking agreement, verb forms and sentence boundaries.

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