Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

There are two types of people who thinks differently from each other one type of people says that competition is good thing in school and at work, The other type of people thinks that competition is not good thing they think that we should help each other try to cooperate more rather then competing against each other.

First we will talk about that competition is good or bad i will try to explain it in my wording i will tell you that competition is good or bad,In my oppinion i thinks that competition id not a good thing in class fellows or between collegs because in competion eveyone try to take more advantages then the others in school students try to take good marks then the others and they dont help each other because a student want to take 1st position so he dont help his class fellow and if a student takes good marks then the other become jealous from him and secretly stared hating him.

This type of things also happens in the offices where different people works together if their is a competition between them them the employs dont have good interacton with each other they dont help each other. According to me this is very bad habbit. I dont like the people who always compete with their fellows because in competition people dont help each other. This is very bad habbit in people, we shouls always help our fellows because helping others is a very good thing. IT spread love and good message in the society and interactions between people become strong and by doing this we can solve every problem of eac other.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

Your opinion is clear: you believe cooperation is preferable because competition can discourage people from helping one another. The examples about students seeking first place and employees not helping colleagues are relevant and show an attempt to explain your view. However, the task asks you to discuss both views, and the benefits of competition are not explained; the opening only reports that some people support it. Your response therefore addresses the question only partially, and the main argument is repeated rather than developed with balanced reasons or specific evidence. To improve, explain one genuine advantage of competition, such as motivating people to improve, then compare it with the benefits of cooperation and support your own position with a developed example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic sequence: you introduce the two positions, give examples from school and work, and finish by recommending cooperation. The school and office examples are relevant, and phrases such as “because” and “by doing this” attempt to connect ideas. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, so the stages of the argument are difficult to distinguish. Several points repeat the claim that competitors do not help each other, while the opening sentence and “First we will talk…” do not create a clear progression through both sides of the question. Use separate paragraphs for the introduction, each viewpoint, and your conclusion. Then organise each paragraph around one main point and use linking expressions selectively to show contrast and cause.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant words, including “competition,” “cooperate,” “jealous,” and “interactions,” which helps communicate the general topic. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive: “good thing,” “bad habbit,” “help each other,” and “competition” recur without much variation. There are also frequent spelling and word-form errors, including “oppinion,” “competion,” “eveyone,” and “interacton,” which make the writing less clear and less controlled. Some combinations are unnatural, such as “take more advantages” and “jealous from him.” Build a topic vocabulary for motivation, achievement, teamwork, and workplace relationships, and check spelling and collocations. More precise wording would let you explain the advantages and disadvantages without repeating the same phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Your writing relies mainly on simple statements and repeated “because” clauses, with little variety in sentence structure. Attempts to join several ideas often produce run-on sentences, for example the opening sentence and the long sentence beginning “In my oppinion i thinks…”. There are frequent errors in agreement and verb forms (“people who thinks,” “different people works,” “a student want”), articles (“is good thing”), and punctuation, including missing sentence boundaries and inconsistent capitalisation. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them using accurate subordinate clauses and contrast structures. Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and full stops carefully when editing.

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