Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

A few Individual believes that competition at Professional life and School life is a Good habbit. but Some others think that we should try to cooperate with our colleagues and Team mates. Our main focus to learning things rather than competing each other.I will be discussing my point of view with a suitable conclusion.

To start with the first point of view, some of the people thinks that in a professional working environment competition with the team members at offices or working hubs is very significant. Becuase it provides us to maintain our confidence. Competition in a working environment help us to learn more things and how can we adapt quick things in a short time frame.Many of the team members search and find new solutions and provide to their team mate to learn it quickly. This approch is very productive in a professional company. Everyone try to learn and find new things and new solutions. Because of this all team mates working in a same group everyone is sharing their own ideas and own approach other sub team mates are also adapt these things and compete the others. For example, all team members working in a software development company and they are all learn about what is happening in the tech world or in the AI industry. Everyone is finding their own research and ideas then project manager compile all the ideas in a frame and compile into one optimum product.

Secondly at school life students and childerns are also try to compete with their class mates and get a good marks. Students are working in multiple things at the same time and they also face hurdles and complex problems. When they get stuck in a complex problem some of other class mates provides a quick solution. This is the main thing that students and mates are working learning things fastly with the help of finding quick solution.

In conclusion, competition is the key sign of the success. Every professional and students must follow this approach and compete with each others.It helps us to grow our carrier in terms of payroll cycles and increase the chances of the promotion as well.

Therefore, I agree with the competition at working environments and school life is very important and play a vital role in fast and productive growth.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear preference for competition, especially in the conclusion, and include relevant examples from workplaces and schools. However, the task asks you to discuss both competition and cooperation, and cooperation receives very little direct treatment. The opening mentions working together, and the software-company example describes sharing ideas, but these points are not developed as a distinct argument for cooperation. The discussion of competition is also repetitive and sometimes unclear—for instance, the school paragraph focuses on classmates providing solutions without explaining how this supports competition. To strengthen the response, explain the benefits and possible limits of each approach, then show why you favour one with a more fully developed example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, paragraphs beginning “To start with” and “Secondly,” and a conclusion. These markers help readers identify the main sections, and the workplace and school examples are placed in relevant paragraphs. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because ideas repeat or connect loosely. In the first body paragraph, confidence, learning quickly, sharing ideas, and competing are introduced without clear links between them. Connectors such as “Because of this” and “Therefore” are used, but they do not always clarify the relationship between claims. Organise each paragraph around one main point, explain it, and then give a directly relevant example; also make the cooperation view a separate, clearly signposted part of the discussion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “professional working environment,” “team members,” “complex problems,” and “solutions,” so the reader can generally understand the subject. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “learn,” “things,” “team mates,” and “new solutions.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice problems, such as “habbit,” “approch,” “childerns,” and “fastly,” which reduce precision. Some expressions are unnatural or unclear, including “maintain our confidence” and “payroll cycles” in the conclusion. Aim for more precise collocations and vary repeated wording; for example, describe how competition can “motivate employees to improve their performance” rather than repeatedly saying it helps people learn things.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “when” and “because,” but the range is limited and complex sentences are often inaccurate. Subject–verb agreement errors occur in “some of the people thinks,” “competition … help us,” and “Everyone try.” Other patterns include missing or incorrect articles and prepositions, as in “focus to learning” and “competing each other.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention: “Because it provides us to maintain our confidence” is a fragment, while several sentences run together without spaces after full stops. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to follow. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly connected supporting clause, then check agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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