Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people thinks that competion at school level,at work and in daily life is a good thing but some people doesn't agree with them,they thinks people should not compete with eachother and they should be more cooperative with eachother rather then competing against eachother.

Overall,The both type of people are right in their own perspective but in my opinion people should compete with eachother at different level of life.I know most people will disagree with my opnion and they re not wrong every person had diferent perspective and thought then eachother.This argument had both advantages and disadvantages and I think its advantage are far more beneficial then effects of its disadvantages.

It had many advantages and benefits for example at school level children compete with with eachother like in studies that who will get more marks or highest marks,In school there are competions between boys and girls that who will get highest marks or who will win the game,it encourages students for doing hardwork,studying more.It helps them keep motivated and they try to do their best,It helps them build confidence.At office level people had competion in doing their work,they compete that who will complete their job and work on time and more efficiently,It keeps them motivated and they try to be better then others.In daily life people ccompete with eachother like who is driving a good car,who has more clean house,who wears nice dress like that.

It also had disadvantages like some people takes the competion very seriously and they try to win it by hook and crook,They would be ready even to harm someone to win the competion.

In conclusion,it's advantages are more beneficial then its disadvantages as competion helps and encourages people to do their work with passion and enthuaism.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall preference for competition, and your examples from school, work and daily life are relevant to the topic. However, the discussion of cooperation is largely limited to the opening, so the response does not fully develop both views as requested. The examples of students striving for higher marks and employees working efficiently explain some benefits, while the disadvantage of people harming others to win is mentioned but not explored. Your position is also somewhat qualified by saying both sides are right, before stating that competition is preferable. To strengthen the response, explain the value of cooperation with a specific example and develop the reasons behind your final preference. The response meets the stated length requirement; eight words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph on benefits, a paragraph on a disadvantage, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the broad direction of your argument. However, progression is limited because the cooperation viewpoint is not given its own developed section, and several ideas are joined in long sentences with commas, making relationships between points less clear. Repeated phrases such as “eachother” and “It helps” also make the writing feel repetitive. Use clearer paragraphing to separate the two views, and connect each example explicitly to the point it supports. More accurate use of linking expressions and pronouns would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “compete,” “motivated,” “confidence,” and “disadvantages.” However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “competition,” “eachother,” and “helps.” Some choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “by hook and crook” in this context and “its advantage are far more beneficial then effects.” Spelling errors, including “competion,” “opnion,” and “enthuaism,” are noticeable and can distract the reader. Build a wider set of precise terms for cooperation and competition, and check spelling and collocations carefully. For example, describe people as “striving to outperform colleagues” rather than repeatedly saying they compete with each other.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use basic structures to express a position, give examples and draw a conclusion. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence boundaries. For example, “Some people thinks” should be “Some people think,” while “some people doesn't agree” should be “some people don't agree.” In “people had competion,” the tense does not fit a general statement; use “people have competition” or, more naturally, “people compete.” Comma splices and capitalisation after commas also make several sentences difficult to read. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine ideas using controlled clauses and full stops.

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