Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people think that cometition at workplace, at school and daily life is a good thing. However, it's perspective of diffrent mindsets and thoughts. While, I acknowledge that only healthy competition is a good thing, rather every competition not a good thing moreover we should think about at some point of time it will become stressfull thing in a life.

Firstly, every competition needs hardwork, strugle, and lot of efforts. While, psychologically competiton having a diffrent aspects involve. For instance, someone take it as a helathy banter and for someone it has a prestige and all. For those who actaully take it as a healthy banter, if they loose it's completly fine for them they learn from that and move on. Furthermore, it's not good for those who actully takes it as a everything and their mindset also full pressurise in this scenario if they losse any competition then it would badly affect their mind may be they would not move on from that banter so it's a psycalogical threats for them.

Secondly, yes halthy banter is must needed everywhere. However, it should be give discaliamer first before any competition or game. For example, in a school two students A and B has been participated in a chess game in result student A won the game and student B accepted the defeat and then learn from it where exactly he has mistaken in the game then it would make sense and it's the healthy competition. Let's suppose student B has actually lost that game and thinking in diffrent way like infront of everyone I lost the game and everything has gone my prestige and confidence then it would be threat for him.

In conclusion, obivously healthy comeption is an important but we should take care of result and the other aspects of that competition, In my view, healthy competition teaches lot of things where exactly lacking we are likewise, and next time we prepare accordingy.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a recognisable opinion: healthy competition can be useful, but excessive pressure can harm people. The examples of students playing chess and reacting differently to losing help illustrate this view. However, the task asks you to discuss both competition and cooperation, and cooperation is not meaningfully explained or supported. Most of the response focuses on whether competition is healthy, so the discussion is only partial. Your position is also not fully consistent: the opening says competition can become stressful, while the conclusion mainly praises its benefits without clearly explaining how cooperation should balance it. To strengthen the response, give each view a developed paragraph, explain the benefits of cooperation, and state your position clearly throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “In conclusion” make the stages visible, and the chess example gives one paragraph a clear focus. However, the overall progression is limited because both body paragraphs largely repeat the idea of healthy competition and its possible psychological effects, rather than developing the two views in the question. Some linking is mechanical or unclear: “While” begins sentences without a clear contrast, and “For those who…” leads into a long sentence whose relationships are difficult to follow. Organise the essay around competition and cooperation, use clearer links between claims and examples, and avoid repeating the same point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “healthy competition,” “prestige,” “confidence,” and “psychologically,” and you try to distinguish between different attitudes to winning and losing. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “cometition,” “helathy banter,” and “psycalogical threats.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, including “full pressurise” and “give discaliamer first.” These issues sometimes obscure your intended meaning, even though the general topic remains clear. Build a reliable set of topic phrases and check spelling and collocations; for example, use “feel under pressure” and “set clear expectations” instead of the unclear phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including conditional examples such as “if they lose, it’s completely fine for them” and “if they lose any competition then it would badly affect their mind.” However, complex sentences are often faulty or difficult to follow, and errors occur frequently. For example, “someone take it” lacks subject–verb agreement, while “two students A and B has been participated” has an incorrect verb construction. Articles, plurals and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “in a life” and the long sentence beginning “Furthermore, it’s not good for those…”. Practise forming accurate clauses before combining them, and check agreement, verb forms and punctuation so that your examples are easier to understand.

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