Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. I agree with this statement but I believe competition has both positive and negative aspects which I am going to describe below with my perceptions.

There is a pros and cons for every component in this world and competition is not none other than that. The good side of competition in work, school and daily life is it may help us to increase our productivity and motivation. It helps us to compare our efforts and output with others. For example, in school, the highest scorer student get award as well as praises and it's motivate other students to work hard on the examination to bring good score in the next examination. It expands students productivity of learning and they try to beat the superior scorer. As a result, the average scores of the class may increases.

However, there is also an adverse effect of competition such as desperation and build a mind of harm to other people. For instance, all the students of a class do not have the same amount of learning capacity to bring good marks on the exam and they losses their confidence when they repeatedly get poor marks. Sometimes it leads student to become rebelous to others. Another example can be in coorporate jobs, people set a mind to pull down someone who is doing good at their job and try to pull legs of others. In contrast, if the work environment becomes cooperative, people may make a good bonding with each other rather than competition.

At the end of the day, cooperating each other should be the ultimate goal at work, at school and in daily life because excessive compition can cause harmful impact to others.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both sides of the discussion and give a clear final preference for cooperation, while acknowledging that competition can raise motivation and productivity. The school example about awards and effort supports the benefits, and the examples of students losing confidence and colleagues undermining one another explain possible harms. However, the opening says “I agree with this statement,” which is unclear because the prompt presents two contrasting views, and your position is not fully explicit until the conclusion. The cooperation side is also less developed: you mention “good bonding” but do not explain in detail how collaboration improves outcomes. State your position precisely in the introduction and extend the cooperation argument with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph on competition’s benefits, a paragraph on its drawbacks and cooperation, and a concluding opinion. Transitions such as “However,” “For instance,” and “As a result” help readers follow the main progression, and the examples generally sit with the points they support. To make the organisation more consistently clear, separate the discussion of cooperation from the drawbacks of competition, since both are combined in the third body paragraph. Some links are also mechanical or unclear, particularly “In contrast,” which introduces cooperation without a clearly stated contrast in the preceding sentence. Use more precise links and make each paragraph’s central purpose explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to discuss motivation, productivity, confidence, and workplace relationships, and phrases such as “adverse effect” and “work environment” show an attempt to vary your expression. However, several inaccurate word choices and collocations make the writing sound unnatural or occasionally obscure: “competition is not none other than that,” “pull legs of others,” and “a mind of harm” do not express the intended meanings clearly. There are also spelling errors, including “coorporate,” “rebelous,” and “compition.” Build a more reliable range by learning common collocations for this topic, such as “undermine a colleague” and “foster cooperation,” and proofread spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses with “when,” “who,” and “if,” and your meaning is generally understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, especially with subject–verb agreement, articles, and plural forms. For example, “the highest scorer student get award” needs agreement and article correction, while “the average scores of the class may increases” uses the wrong verb form after “may.” In “they losses their confidence,” the verb form is also incorrect. There are some awkward sentence constructions, such as “There is a pros and cons,” which affect accuracy. Review agreement and verb patterns, and check each sentence for singular/plural consistency before submitting.

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