Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In recent years, The few number of individuals believe that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. While, others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. The eassy will discuss about both views and my opinion on this matter.

On the one hand, there are several reasons why competition at work, at school and daily life is a good thing. The first and formost reason is people work hard and improve their skills. To ellaborate, people work hand in schools they improve their academic marks and gain knowledge about their studies. Additionally, people face competition in their life they become financial indepent and gain income for their daily basic needs. Moreover, people build their confidence and become great person in their life because when people participate in competitions they get experience how to face their problems in their life.

On the other hand, there are many benifits of people try to cooperate with others. Firstly, it asist to individuals reduce their stress and depression because they have not tension about their work and study and people work each others in their life. Futhermore, they have no pressure about their work and how to represent their work and studies. Additionally, people learn more things from other individuals.

In conclusion, From my prespective, I personally believe that the both statements are benefical for people because Firstly, people become financial indepent and improve their skills. Secondly, people reduce their stress and pressure.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You discuss both competition and cooperation and give a personal view, so the response is relevant to the prompt. However, the ideas are only briefly stated: competition is linked to working hard, financial independence and confidence, while cooperation is said to reduce stress and help people learn. These points need clearer explanation and specific examples to show how or why the benefits occur. Your conclusion says both approaches are beneficial, but does not explain when one might be preferable or develop a clear position. The response also falls 27 words short of the 250-word minimum; the 29 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop each main point with explanation or an example to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. The signposts “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the broad organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and several points are added without showing how they connect. For example, the competition paragraph moves from academic marks to financial independence and then confidence, with little explanation linking these claims. The cooperation paragraph similarly lists reduced stress, less pressure and learning from others. Some linking phrases are repetitive or mechanical, particularly “Additionally” and “Firstly.” Group related ideas and use clearer cause-and-effect links, then ensure the conclusion follows directly from the discussion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “competition,” “cooperate,” “academic marks,” “financially independent,” and “confidence.” However, the range is limited, and some word choices or combinations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “people work hand in schools,” “people work each others,” and “great person.” Spelling errors—including “formost,” “ellaborate,” “benifits,” and “prespective”—are noticeable and reduce the overall accuracy of the vocabulary. Aim to learn common collocations for this topic and check spelling carefully. More precise expressions such as “collaborate with colleagues” or “develop practical skills” would help you express your points more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use basic complex structures, including “because” clauses and contrastive openings such as “On the one hand.” However, the range remains limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to understand. For example, “people work hand in schools they improve their academic marks” joins clauses without correct punctuation or a clear grammatical link, while “people work each others in their life” has an incomplete verb pattern. There are also problems with articles and sentence construction in “the both statements.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using conjunctions and correct punctuation. Check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb.

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