Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is indeed true that few masses beleive that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a better thing others think that we should try to cooperate more rather than competetion against each others. I will discuss both view points nad give my opinion on this matter.

On the one hand , there are several benefits competition at work , at school one major benefit is it encourage to masses to improve their skills and learn new knowledge. To elabborate it, when people see other doing well they can try to improve their skilld and do work harder and they can get good performance in their work.For example, a student do work harder because he want to get better performance in their academic study. Moreover, it helps to build confident person and when people participate in competetion they become more confidental person because they learn more experience how to show their performance in public and how to do work hard.

On the other hand, there are many benefits of cooperate with others firstly it helps to people reduce their stress. To explicate it, when individuals do their work with each other they don"t have attention about work when they do work alone they have more pressure about work but cooperate with other they learn many things.

To conclude, i beleive that both is helpful for people because competetition help to build their confidence and improve their mistakes However, cooperate with other teach many things such as masses have no worry about work and create good bondin with other.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides of the discussion and state a view in the introduction and conclusion: competition can build confidence and improve performance, while cooperation can reduce pressure and help people learn. However, these ideas are only briefly explained, and the cooperation side is less developed than the competition side; it needs a specific example and clearer explanation of how working together reduces stress. Your position that both are helpful is present, but the conclusion does not fully weigh when each approach is most useful. The response is 240 words, so it is 10 words below the 250-word minimum; the 21 words copied from the prompt are not counted. Develop the ideas further and add relevant support to meet the requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. The signposts “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “To conclude” help readers follow the broad direction. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and several links are mechanical or unclear. For example, “firstly” introduces a point but is not followed by a clearly organised sequence, while the sentence beginning “when individuals do their work with each other” becomes difficult to follow as it contrasts working alone and cooperating. The conclusion also combines several ideas without clear punctuation. Use one main idea per paragraph, connect explanation and example explicitly, and make references such as “it” and “they” unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “competition,” “cooperate,” “improve their skills,” “pressure,” and “performance.” However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “work,” “people,” and “benefits.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as “beleive,” “competetion,” “confidental person,” and “good bondin,” which make parts of the response less clear or natural. Some combinations are awkward, for example “learn more experience” and “build confident person.” Aim to use accurate topic-specific phrases and check spelling and word forms. More precise expressions for the effects of competition and cooperation would make your ideas easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including explanations introduced by “when” and “because,” but the range is limited and complex sentences are often faulty. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent: “it encourage” should be “it encourages,” and “a student do work harder” should be “a student works harder.” There are also problems with articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries, as in “a student … he want” and the run-on conclusion beginning “competition help to build their confidence … However.” These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a subordinate clause, and check agreement, articles, and punctuation before adding further detail.

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