Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The modern world has become at a competative state in almost every things done through our daily life.Most people believe that competition at work,at educational institutions and in daily life is a positive thing, while other argue that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing agaist each other.This essay will discuss about these two contrasting views and explain why i believe in competition in every sector is a postive thing.

To begin with, competition at work or at school and in daily life is good thing because these encourage us to be more productive in building our thinking, confidence and to sharpen the aim to achieve.In my opinion, competition in every sectors builds a person more stronger in every aspects of his life and will gain a ability to problem solving soutions.For example, a child who is bad maths can improve by teachers arrange them activities to do better.Thus this is a kind of positive impact gained by competating each other.

On the flip side, some individuals argue that everyone must cooperate each other rather than competating. Coorperating with everyone keeps us a good mutual relationship stronger and a kind of help. In my opinion, there are some duration in life to cooperate with everyone as per situation but not in every aspects of life. Competition helps us to bring every situation much easier and also helps in gaining problem solving abilities.For instance, a person who always depend on someone or like cooperating in one cannot handle other cautions affecting the persons life and will be helpless without knowing what to do.Hence, this is my opinion about cooperating someone.

To conclude, many people think that competition at work,at educational institutions and in daily life is a positive thing, while other argue with that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing agaist each other and my opinion regarding this views is to have a competition in every sector.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the question and state a clear preference for competition in the introduction and conclusion. The discussion of competition includes relevant benefits, such as productivity, confidence and problem-solving, while the cooperation paragraph recognises its value for relationships. However, the task is only partly developed: the cooperation view is described briefly, and the example about a child improving in maths does not clearly show how competition produces that improvement. The claim that competition makes “every situation much easier” is also broad and not explained. To strengthen the response, explain the benefits and possible drawbacks of each view with specific, well-linked examples, and clarify why your position is preferable. The stated length requirement is met; 20 words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Transitions such as “To begin with,” “On the flip side,” and “To conclude” help signal the stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and several ideas are joined without showing their precise relationship. For example, the maths example is followed by “Thus this is a kind of positive impact” without clearly explaining the role of competition. The cooperation paragraph shifts quickly from relationships to personal independence, and the conclusion largely repeats the introduction. Use clearer links between each claim and its explanation, and organise each body paragraph around one main idea with supporting detail.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “competition,” “cooperate,” “productive,” “confidence,” and “problem-solving.” These choices make the general subject understandable. However, the range is limited and several spelling, word-form and collocation errors make the writing less clear or natural, such as “competative,” “agaist,” “Coorperating,” “a positive impact gained by competating,” and “a good mutual relationship stronger.” Some phrases are also vague, including “every situation much easier” and “other cautions affecting the persons life.” Aim for accurate topic-specific expressions and check spelling carefully. For instance, describe how cooperation “strengthens relationships” and how competition can “motivate people to improve their performance,” rather than relying on broad or awkward wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a contrast in the opening and clauses introduced by “because” and “who.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. Examples include “Most people believe … while other argue,” “competition … is good thing because these encourage us,” and “a child who is bad maths can improve by teachers arrange them activities.” These show problems with agreement, articles, prepositions and clause construction. Punctuation and spacing also need attention, as in “life.Most” and “achieve.For.” Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly formed supporting clause, then check articles, plural forms and verb agreement.

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