Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given information is true with the topic of that we should try to cooperate more rather than competing against each other. because we are human being. We need each others to live in this world. It is important to support each others to be successful. neither some will go front of the world and some wil lag behind. That is not how we being taught. We have to help each other in our bad or good time. That is how a good world we can create.

On the other hand, those who believe that we should be competitive at wok, at school and in daily life. Thoose people are meaningless. Cause with this kind of mentality we cant be with each another in our bad time. We will begin to hate each other. We will be not ablw to get help too. Coowkers and schoolmates are our real friends. We should be cooperative with each others.

For the whole esay we can say that people should be supportive to each other.

That is how a real beutiful world can be create. It is not simple and easy to see someone else success in front of me. But we should not be jeaous, we should help and be happy in others happiness. Then they will be happy in our success. By supporting each other we may help each other in many ways. We should always be happy and supportive with others.People should always be there for each others. We should be competetive but not for all the time. It decreases our mind over the time. We should be careful about this.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear preference for cooperation, especially in statements such as “We should be cooperative” and “people should be supportive to each other,” and you offer relevant reasons about mutual help and jealousy. However, the discussion of competition is not balanced or sufficiently explained: calling competitive people “meaningless” does not explain why competition might motivate achievement or improve performance. Your position also shifts slightly when you conclude, “We should be competitive but not for all the time,” without clarifying when competition is useful. To strengthen the response, explain both views fairly, then support your own position with a specific example and a consistent conclusion. The response meets the required length; 13 words copied from the task prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, and phrases such as “On the other hand” and “For the whole essay” signal a change of focus. The reader can generally identify your main view: cooperation is preferable. However, ideas are not arranged in a clear progression. The first paragraph repeats the value of helping others, while the final paragraph returns to similar points without developing a distinct conclusion. Some links are unclear, as in “neither some will go front of the world and some wil lag behind,” and the contrast between cooperation and competition is not consistently organised. Group related reasons together, use each paragraph for a clear purpose, and make references and transitions more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant words, including “cooperate,” “competitive,” “supportive,” and “successful,” so your central message is usually understandable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and often imprecise, which limits the clarity of your argument. For example, “those people are meaningless” is an unsuitable way to describe people who favour competition, and “go front of the world” does not clearly express the idea of getting ahead. There are also frequent spelling errors, including “Thoose,” “beutiful,” “jeaous,” and “competetive.” Build a wider range of accurate expressions for discussing motivation, achievement, teamwork, and fairness, and proofread spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences use simple structures, and you attempt some longer forms, such as “It is not simple and easy to see someone else success in front of me.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Examples include “because we are human being,” “We need each others,” and “That is how a good world we can create,” which show problems with articles, plurals, and sentence structure. The fragment beginning “neither some will go…” is also difficult to interpret. Try to produce accurate complete sentences first, then add a wider range of clauses using clear patterns. Check subject–verb agreement, articles, plural forms, and punctuation when editing.

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