Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There are number of individuals believe that compeition at work and at school as well as daily life is essential thing. While othere think that we should not competing against each other and try to be cooperate with each other. Though compitions plays a great role in our life for developing but i would like to say that by cooperating is more imprant.

On the one hand, Compitions always place in every where in human life. Without compitions there will no joy of achiveing enything. To give a example like if there is no compitions among students in the class, students cannot learn or can not develope there knowlegue. Moreover some time students or worker became each otherr emny, the resons is simple that in a compitions one students have to defate other that why some time there bonding close down.

On the other hand, by cooperating people can be more close to each other. And added that cooperating help indiviuals to be mopre socialized. To cites an example, some time we need to coooperatd each other by helping in there tax or work without it will be more complex to handle there work. In addtions people will be more friendly to each other. So, if eny nation wants to develop they need to learn how to cooperated each other as it is essential thing for human civilaiztion.

In conclusion, considering both side i would like to say that yes we need commpitions but we need to learn more about cooperating each other.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both competition and cooperation and give a clear preference for cooperation, especially in the opening and conclusion. The examples about students learning through competition and people helping with work are relevant to the question. However, the discussion is only partly developed: the claim that competition brings “no joy of achieving anything” without it is asserted rather than explained, and the possible harm of rivalry is mentioned briefly without showing its effects. The cooperation argument is also broad; the example of helping with work could be made more specific. To strengthen the response, explain how each example supports your view and clarify when competition may be useful but cooperation is more beneficial overall.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” make the shift between the two positions easy to follow, and the conclusion returns to your main preference. Some connections are less clear or mechanical, however. For example, “Moreover some time students or worker became each otherr emny” moves abruptly from learning to hostility, while “And added that” does not connect smoothly to the preceding point. Several sentences also begin with “So” or “In addition” without clearly showing how the ideas relate. Use clearer links between claims and examples, and make references such as “there work” unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “competition,” “cooperating,” “develop,” and “socialized,” so the reader can generally identify your main ideas. However, the range is limited and several words are repeated, particularly “competition” and “cooperating.” Frequent spelling errors, such as “compeition,” “achiveing,” and “knowlegue,” make the writing harder to read, while some choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “students or worker became each otherr emny” and “cooperatd each other.” Aim to learn accurate forms and common collocations, such as “compete with one another” and “cooperate with others.” More precise vocabulary for benefits and drawbacks would also help you explain your ideas with less repetition.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrastive opening with “While” and a conditional sentence beginning “if any nation wants to develop.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors in basic sentence patterns occur throughout. For example, “There are number of individuals believe” lacks a correct noun phrase and clause structure; “we should not competing” uses the wrong verb form; and “Without competitions there will no joy” is missing a verb. Subject–verb agreement and articles are also inconsistent, as in “competitions plays” and “a example.” Practise building accurate sentences with a subject and finite verb, then check verb forms, articles, and agreement before adding more complex clauses.

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