Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people believe that there should be competition at each level and in every aspects of life while others have opposite opinion. In their point of view, people should be cooperative with others.

In this era of advancement, everyone is trying to fuilfill their desires and for this they are adapting a sense of being at top. They are in a competion with themselves and at the same time with others practically and socially. According to them, there must be an environment of competition in every field and at every level, so they can get motivation to reach their goals. They believe that, competition is a type of energy that is necessary for for them who are honest with their future as it refuels them for working hard. According to their thought, one who is clever and work day and night can get what he want.

There are some type of people who are diagree with them. They believe that there should not be competition rather we should take other people with them. According to them, there must be an environment of cooperation and helping others in every field and at every level. They are on a belief that if there is an environment of cooperation, they can grow well and learn from others. These people actually understand the worth of team work and most of big discoveries are no doubt result of this team work. They give example of nations who adapt cooperation with their people and country in difficult situation are now in list of most adavncing nation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both sides by explaining that competition can motivate people to work towards goals, while cooperation supports learning and teamwork. However, the discussion remains general and does not fully develop either view: for example, the claim that competition “refuels them for working hard” is not illustrated with a specific situation, and the reference to nations that cooperate is vague. Most importantly, the task asks for your own opinion, but you do not clearly state which approach you support or how you would balance the two. To strengthen the response, give a direct position and develop each side with a clear reason and a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: it introduces the two views, discusses competition in one paragraph, and then turns to cooperation. Phrases such as “According to them” and “There are some type of people who…” help signal whose views are being presented. However, the progression is limited because the ideas within each paragraph repeat rather than build: the claim about competition being needed “at every level” appears more than once, as does the call for cooperation. The final paragraph also ends with a broad example without a concluding statement or a clear link to your own position. Organise each paragraph around one main point, support it, and use a brief conclusion to complete the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “motivation,” “cooperation,” “team work,” and “discoveries,” so the reader can follow the general subject. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise, such as “at every level,” “environment,” and “According to them.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “fuilfill,” “competion,” “diagree,” and “adavncing,” which reduce the accuracy and polish of the writing. Some collocations are unnatural, for example “take other people with them” and “honest with their future.” Build a wider set of precise expressions for describing competition and collaboration, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences using clauses, such as “They believe that, competition is a type of energy…” and “They are on a belief that if there is an environment of cooperation…”. This shows an effort to connect ideas, but complex structures are often faulty, and many sentences rely on similar patterns. Errors include subject–verb agreement in “one who is clever and work,” the incorrect construction “what he want,” and the plural form in “every aspects.” There are also punctuation problems, such as the comma after “that” in “They believe that, competition…”. Practise accurate agreement, articles and plurals, and vary sentence forms while keeping each sentence clear.

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