Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Few peoples belive that race at work , at school and in ordinary life is a blessing. The people who are opponent belives that they should helpout with hospitality, as compaire to conflicting togather.

Firstly, competation is a way in which people belive that they have the other persons who are competing to them and if they do any kind of delay they will lose their present seat. For example, if any job holder work in a company and he donot work properly on given time period and his competitaor do it within the time period he will overcome it. Secondally, if a student did not study hard and the other student study say and night he compeat easily. such as, a lurnwer in high school work daily and the other one didnot do its work regulary the first on easily overcome the second one.

On the other hand, if the co-worker help their companions in their filed if any one of them is weak it will cmore help full for the team member. Example of this is that, if any co-worker weak in one area and the other khow about and the other is weaker in which the fiest one have knowledge of it both do work collectivily and overcome on eachother. Overall, if a study person in college studied hard but not have grip on one subjet but the the other one have the authority to solve the problem they should work togather. For example if a student weaker in math and the other is in science they should work togather to solve the problem collectivily.

In my openion bgoth the way are batter because if there is no competitor we donot do thair work and if their is not help each other we also didnot do thaie4 work both are perfectaly fine

To conclude that, we should woek togather.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides of the question: the first main paragraph presents competition through workplace and student examples, while the next describes colleagues and students helping one another. Your final sentence also gives a view, but it is difficult to interpret: “both are perfectly fine” suggests equal support for both, whereas the conclusion says people “should work together.” This leaves your position unclear. The ideas are relevant, but they are mostly asserted through repeated, hypothetical examples rather than explained in depth. For instance, you could clarify how competition motivates effort and when cooperation produces better outcomes, then state which approach you consider more important and why. This limited development and uncertain position keep the response from fully addressing the task.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “On the other hand,” and “To conclude” help readers recognise the intended sections. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and several examples repeat the same point without adding a distinct step to the argument. The long cooperation paragraph moves from co-workers to college students, while phrases such as “Overall” and “For example” do not always make the relationship between ideas clear. Some references are also difficult to follow, including “the other one” and “both do work collectively.” Organise each body paragraph around one clear claim, explain it, and use one focused example. Make links between sentences precise rather than relying mainly on basic transition phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “competitor,” “co-worker,” “team member,” and “work together,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and many words are misspelled or used inaccurately, which sometimes makes meaning difficult to recover: “competation,” “lurnwer,” “collectivily,” and “openion” are examples. Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “race” for competition and “helpout with hospitality” for cooperation. Repetition of “work,” “student,” and “the other one” further restricts precision. Build a small set of accurate topic phrases and check spelling and collocations; for example, use “compete for a position” or “collaborate with colleagues” where appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences using “if,” “and,” and “but,” and there are some simple sentence patterns that communicate the general topic. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are frequently faulty, making relationships between ideas hard to follow. Examples include “if any job holder work” and “if a student weaker in math,” where verb forms or required sentence elements are missing. Agreement and tense are also inconsistent, as in “the other student study” and “both are perfectly fine” after a discussion framed in the past. Punctuation and sentence boundaries need attention, particularly in the long opening body paragraph. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, complete conditional clauses, and shorter sentences before combining ideas.

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