Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Many people think that being competitive at work, school and in our daily life in general is a fantastic approach. While others believe we ought to cooperate more, I also think that we must help each other rather than competing.

Supporters of a competiition between coworkers and in daily life think its a great thing. Although it might result with a clash or big arguments among themselves, many believe it increases the output and production in an individual. For instance, departements such as sales in a retail company relies heavily on commisions making the existence of a competition among sales representatives to close a deal a good thing.

Opponents to the competition theory believe in cooperation and assisting more. Whatever are the outcomes needed to hit a target or reaching a personal desired goal we should treat each other with good and respect, an oppinion that i share, hoping the best for one another. Take a musical band for example, if a certain competition exists to be the most loved member by the fans they will never last for a single day, they need to be like a single bond and supporting to one another in order to succeed. Consequently, existence of a competition might end with a bad result, we should always cooperate and care for each other.

In conclusion, i acknowledge that competition in jobs and in daily life might increase a person's output. However, i think that is not what we were created for, we should care and wish the best to others.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You discuss both perspectives and make your own position clear: you acknowledge that competition can raise output, but argue that cooperation is more important. The sales-team example gives a relevant reason for competition, while the band example illustrates why cooperation matters. This covers the task, but the two sides are not developed equally. The competition paragraph focuses mainly on productivity and does not consider possible benefits such as motivation or personal improvement; the cooperation argument is more fully explained. The claim that competition is “not what we were created for” is also broad and is not supported with a clear reason. Develop each view with a specific explanation and make the final justification for your opinion more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. The progression from the benefits of competition to the case for cooperation is easy to follow, and examples help organise the main points. However, some links between ideas are mechanical or unclear. For example, “Although it might result with a clash or big arguments” does not connect smoothly to the claim about increased output, and “Whatever are the outcomes needed” makes the start of the cooperation paragraph difficult to follow. The conclusion repeats the position but adds little synthesis. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example explicitly to the point it supports; vary linking expressions rather than relying mainly on “Although,” “For instance,” and “Consequently.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to discuss the topic and include some relevant terms, such as “output,” “sales representatives,” “commissions,” and “cooperate.” The examples also show an attempt to use topic-specific language. However, several spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, including “competiition,” “departements,” “oppinion,” and “commisions.” Some phrases are unnatural or imprecise, such as “result with a clash,” “a single bond,” and “the most loved member by the fans.” Repetition of “competition,” “good,” and “cooperate” also limits flexibility. Aim for accurate collocations and more precise alternatives—for example, “lead to conflict,” “work as a unified team,” and “most popular with fans”—and proofread spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including a concessive opening with “Although” and conditional structures such as “if a certain competition exists … they will never last.” Meaning is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors remain. In “Supporters … think its a great thing,” the possessive should be “it’s” for “it is”; “departments … relies” has a subject–verb agreement error; and “Whatever are the outcomes needed” has an incorrect clause structure. There are also issues with articles and sentence boundaries, including the opening fragment-like contrast beginning “While others believe…” and the comma splice in “we should always cooperate and care for each other” after the preceding clause. Review agreement, clause construction, and punctuation, while keeping the complex structures you are attempting.

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