Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadys; People commonaly believe that to become more popular and rich they will always ready for competition with more poweful people from them. Although; in my view it was good way for people to leading more frequently on their way.

People believe that competition at work, at school and as well as in daily life is a good things because by this way youngers can make their future more settle and they will learn about the meaning of competition. it can be greatly beneficial to individuals and the society. For instance, They will become more agressive toward the jobs, on studies a well as on their own daily activities also. For example; they will known about the real struggles, andd they more focus on their fields, developed diffrent skills etc. Futhermore; It should also be noted that, people can learn to take their own position through other competitor by their own hardwork.

Meanwhile; others people believe that we should be cooperated more rather than competing against each other. In my opinion; I frimly disagree with the given statements by doing this youngers can not fight for their own goals they will think they will cannot top their opponents. For examples; They will not developed confidents arounds the people, they will think less than other peoples etc.

In conclusion; It conclude that people can be well developed and they will be more confidents infront of many peoples. It will helps people to communicate woith otner people and they trust on theit own path.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the topic and state a preference for competition, with relevant points about motivation, learning to face challenges, and confidence. However, the discussion of cooperation is not genuinely developed: you mainly reject it by saying young people would not fight for their goals, without explaining what supporters of cooperation value or when working together is beneficial. Your position is also difficult to follow because the opening says competition is a good way forward, while the body says you “firmly disagree” with the view that people should cooperate more. Examples such as becoming “more aggressive” toward jobs and studies are asserted rather than explained. To strengthen the response, present both views fairly, make your position consistent, and support each main reason with a clear explanation or specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph about competition, one about cooperation, and a conclusion. This gives the reader a basic route through the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is weak, and several ideas are repeated or left unclear. The competition paragraph moves from future security to aggression, struggles, focus, skills, and taking a position without showing how these points connect. Linking words such as “Furthermore,” “Meanwhile,” and “In conclusion” are used, but the frequent semicolons and repeated “For example” do not create clear relationships between ideas. The conclusion also introduces communication and trust without linking them clearly to the earlier argument. Use fewer, more precise transitions and organise each paragraph around one main point followed by explanation and an example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “competition,” “cooperate,” “struggles,” “competitor,” and “goals,” so the subject is generally identifiable. However, the range is basic and several word choices or forms make meaning difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “more settle,” “agressive toward the jobs,” and “take their own position through other competitor” are not natural or precise in this context. Spelling errors, including “Nowadys,” “commonaly,” “confidents,” and “diffrent,” also distract the reader. Aim to learn accurate collocations for discussing work and education, and check spelling and word forms carefully. For example, describe competition as motivating people to “improve their performance,” rather than saying they become aggressive toward jobs or studies.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a subordinate clause beginning “because,” and the overall meaning can usually be followed. However, control is inconsistent, especially in longer sentences. Examples include “they will always ready” (missing a verb), “it was good way” (article and tense problems), “youngers can make” (incorrect noun form), and “they will known” (incorrect verb form). Agreement and sentence construction are also problematic in “It will helps people” and “others people believe.” Punctuation is frequently inaccurate: semicolons appear where full stops or commas are needed, and capital letters are used inconsistently after them. Build shorter, complete sentences first, then add complex structures only when you can maintain correct subject–verb agreement and verb forms.

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