Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people believe on competition, either it is a school or a wrokplace or a daily life routine. Rest of them appreciate the idea of cooperation with them instead of competition. I agree with the second view because everyone is not blessed with the same thing. If someone is lacking in the areas, one should help that person to cope with.

One the one hand, individuals appreciate the idea of competition. Though the importance of competition cannot be overlooked. If any country has competitive people, there would be more chances for the development. These intelligent people will compete on international level that will lead to the success of that country. For example, winning a scholarship or getting a good job in foreign country on the base of their intelligence wil increase the reputation of that relevant country throughout the world.

On the other hand, some people support the ideas of cooperation rather than competition. I agree with this view because everyone has different qualities and they are not blessed in the same way, and everyone needs help in social or domestic issues. Moreover, cooperating with others develops a healthy society. For instance, a mutual relationship with the others helps a lot for some people. Cooperating with neighbours, colleagues and fellows will make a strong bond among them, that could offer benefit iin future.

To conclude, I agree with the second idea because qualities among individuals varies. Some people thinks that there should be competition, while others believe that cooperation is important than competing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the discussion and state a clear preference for cooperation, especially in the introduction and conclusion. The point that people have different qualities and may need help is relevant, and the example of neighbours and colleagues illustrates how cooperation can strengthen relationships. However, the competition argument is developed mainly through the broad claim that competitive people help a country develop; the scholarship and overseas-job example does not clearly explain how competition itself produces this benefit. The cooperation side is also general, with limited explanation of when cooperation is preferable or how it helps in practical situations. Develop each main idea with a clearer cause-and-effect explanation and make the examples more directly support your claims.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. The contrast markers “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” help readers follow the discussion, while “For example” and “Moreover” signal supporting points. Overall, the ideas are arranged coherently. Some links are mechanical or unclear, however: “Though the importance of competition cannot be overlooked” is a fragment-like transition, and “that could offer benefit in future” has an unclear reference. The conclusion also repeats the two positions rather than bringing the reasoning together. Use clearer links between claims and examples, and ensure pronouns refer unmistakably to the intended idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “competition,” “cooperation,” “development,” “reputation,” and “healthy society,” and you attempt some less common expressions such as “mutual relationship.” This gives you enough language to communicate the main ideas, but word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or unnatural. Examples include “believe on competition,” “on the base of their intelligence,” and “qualities among individuals varies.” There are also spelling errors such as “wrokplace,” “wil,” and “iin,” which reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of topic collocations and check spelling carefully; this will make your arguments clearer and more natural without requiring unnecessarily advanced vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional structure in “If any country has competitive people, there would be more chances for the development” and a relative clause in “qualities and they are not blessed in the same way.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make the intended relationships harder to follow. For example, “everyone needs help” is followed by a sentence with unclear structure, while “qualities among individuals varies” has subject–verb disagreement and “Some people thinks” has the same problem. The opening also contains an incomplete construction: “Some people believe on competition, either it is…” Practise complete sentence patterns, agreement, and accurate clause formation, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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