Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people think that compitition at work,school,and in daily life is a good thing .And it's actually a good habit from these the people become anergetic and do ther work properly .So I agree with the given statment .

In our daily life we are so busy for family ,at office and other thing which we do in our daily life .But some time we have to do the work proply and take compitition with other to do your work properly and in anergetic mode so the maneger or school teacher and our family can proudly say that's my son ,student .And some Time we fail but we can not give up its truth of life .from this we become brave and good person for family,office,and any other place . Some time we think to give up and not do anything then from that time aur bad days are started and noone can call you and you become solo and loser in your familys ayes, in socity ,and in your office.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 171 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you state your position clearly, the prompt asks to discuss both competition and cooperation. You have focused almost exclusively on competition, failing to address the benefits of cooperation as requested. The ideas provided are repetitive and lack the depth required for an academic essay. To improve, you must ensure all parts of the prompt are addressed with balanced arguments and sufficient supporting evidence to meet the length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no introduction or conclusion, and the body paragraphs are not clearly delineated. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'and' and 'some time' to start sentences. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow because the sentences are loosely connected and lack logical flow. To improve, you should use clear paragraphing to separate your introduction, the two sides of the argument, and your conclusion. Incorporate transition words like 'however', 'furthermore', and 'on the other hand' to link your ideas more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying on basic words like 'good', 'work', and 'properly'. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'compitition', 'anergetic', 'ther', 'statment', 'proply', 'maneger', 'aur', and 'socity'. These errors, combined with the limited range of vocabulary, make it difficult to convey complex ideas. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your vocabulary to include more precise, academic terms related to the topic and focus on accurate spelling. Avoid using informal or conversational phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. For example, 'from these the people become anergetic' is syntactically unclear. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, and punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with commas and spacing. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct subject-verb agreement, and learning how to combine simple sentences into more complex, grammatically correct structures.

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