Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
In recent days,competition is rising in all field's such as schools,universities,entrance exams and on workplace.Some individual opine that it is a best thing that competition is good for jobs,at school whereas other believes that we should encourage people to teamwork more instead of competing against wit others.I will discuss both the views in the following paragraphs before giving my opinion.
To commence with,competition is a good thing that people and children can recognize their abilities.To explain this,with the help of competition children can learn how to prepare the exams and they can develop their skills such as, self- confidence,work hard and try to more to achieve their goals.For example,a survey was conducted by The Harward University in 2021 ,revealed that 70% of children can enhance their skills by participating in different competitions.Similarly,employees may work harder to earn a promotion and receive recognition for their performance.
On the other hand,in schools and in workplaces try to convenience them to work in a team.To explain this,it is one of the best opportunity to work in a team so they can share their ideas with others and develop their thinking level by getting different views.In school ,teacher can encourage children to work project in a team.For instance,a headline was published in The BBC (British Broadcasting Co-operation) in 2019 that people was superior intelligent who were working in a team and they had high level IQ level.
In conclusion,although competition make people and children more attentive and conscious,yet working in a cooperate enhance their skills.I agree with this statement that working them in a team that can make people more confident and they can develop their personal and professional growth.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing both competition and cooperation and providing a clear personal opinion. The ideas are relevant, though some development is slightly superficial. For instance, the argument regarding competition helping children develop skills is supported by a specific example, but the explanation could be more nuanced. The position is consistent throughout the essay, and the conclusion clearly states the writer's preference for cooperation. To reach a higher band, ensure that the supporting examples are more logically integrated and that the discussion of both sides is balanced in depth.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices such as 'To commence with', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion' are used to signal the structure. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly repetitive. Referencing is generally clear, but there are instances where the flow between sentences feels a bit disjointed, particularly in the second paragraph. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between ideas would enhance the overall coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to express ideas clearly. There are attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'professional growth' and 'recognition'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choices and minor errors, such as 'in all field's' (fields), 'try to convenience them' (convince), and 'working in a cooperate' (cooperation). The range is somewhat limited, and the repetition of basic terms like 'good thing' and 'skills' suggests a need for a broader range of synonyms and more precise collocations to convey ideas with greater sophistication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('competition make people', 'people was superior'), incorrect article usage, and punctuation errors (e.g., missing spaces after commas). These errors are noticeable and occur throughout the text. While they do not prevent communication, they do impact the fluency of the reading. To improve, the writer should focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and ensuring consistent subject-verb agreement.
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