Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
There are two types of people in this world.Some belive that a beneficial to have competition at work , at school and in daily life in general,while others considere that team working is most important.From my point of view, competing is a huge advantages and we are going to argue that.
Firstly,competing is advantegeous tool which can help indivuduals to surpasse themselves and achive something tha they belivare not capable.In compinies where they have a competition regulary , the workforce results will be enhance because everyone will give his best. Same thing at school or in daily life ,human being are naturally competitors.For instance , in highschool peaple try to do their best to be the top of the class and consequently improve their mark,while in college there is no order ,as result a decrease of grades.I belive that if there is a positif competition with others or even with ourself it ameliorate and make a big difference.
On the others , the most of people should find that anyone shoud stay in his confort zone. They argue with there is going to have jalousy in the group .Furtheremore, some peaple may lose can lose confidence and that is very detrimental for perfomance .For exemple, some completely change and become evils just because they do not will.Therefore these reduce the results of the firms w grades or even in life in general.
in conclusion, a fraction accept to compete each others to be more productive while others fell more confortable with team work and avoid jalousy.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention that competition helps individuals 'surpasse themselves', the explanation remains superficial. The counter-argument regarding cooperation is also underdeveloped, relying on vague statements like 'some completely change and become evils'. To reach a higher band, you need to provide more specific, well-supported examples and ensure that your arguments are fully explored rather than just stated. The conclusion is also quite brief and does not effectively summarize the main points discussed in the body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'On the others' is an incorrect collocation for introducing a contrasting view, and 'as result' lacks the necessary article. The progression of ideas is sometimes difficult to follow due to these errors in linking. While there is an attempt to use transition words like 'Firstly', 'For instance', and 'Therefore', the overall flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and missing logical connectors between sentences.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors that occasionally impede readability, such as 'belive', 'considere', 'advantegeous', 'indivuduals', 'surpasse', 'achive', 'peaple', and 'positif'. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to use less common items accurately. Phrases like 'become evils' are not appropriate for an academic essay. To improve, you should focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic words and expanding your range of collocations to express ideas more precisely.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('human being are'), missing articles ('in highschool'), and incorrect sentence structures ('They argue with there is going to have jalousy'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with many missing spaces after commas and periods. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often marred by errors that make the meaning unclear. You need to focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading to eliminate these frequent slips, which currently hinder the clarity of your writing.
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