Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some people argue that competition at work, at school and in every day life is a good thing. While others, are of the opinion that people should cooperate instead of competing against each other. This essay will discuss both views and give a relevant examples.

On one hand, people compete at work, schools, and daily life for various reasons. Those who compete at work places always strive to stay relevant and notice for their intense effort, while those who compete in education often do such because they want to be seen as the best in their academic pursuit, while in real life is simply because they want to belong to a class people should respect for what they have. Well, all these can some times increase the chances of people having riff which can also increase envy and jealousy among friends, colleagues and theme mates at work places which is not good for a work environment. For instance, back then at the university i was one person who would always exhibit some level of competition among my classmates reason because i saw that the prize for competition was worth striving for, so most brilliant people would put their best to achieve good result because they want to win the finally prize but in in never promoted oneness among us, as there was no form of friendship among classmates.

On the other hand, cooperation among people would enable the dull ones to stay active in a given environment and would also assist to facilitate the finishing of every given task. One great advantage of cooperation is that it would encourage peace and harmony among staff, class mate and also burst the brain of dull people among them. For instance, during our last project presentation in school we were grouped in our class, as a result of that everybody all participated in the final presentation that allows us to emerge with good grades.

In summary, people should encourage cooperation as its great benefits is to boost and encourage peace and harmony among brethern.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, though the opinion is somewhat brief and lacks depth. The ideas regarding competition and cooperation are relevant, but the development is inconsistent. For instance, the discussion on competition is a bit repetitive, focusing heavily on personal experience rather than broader societal implications. While the prompt is addressed, the conclusion is quite abrupt and does not fully synthesize the arguments presented. To improve, ensure that each body paragraph provides a clear, well-supported argument that directly links back to the prompt's core question, and ensure your own position is clearly stated and consistently maintained throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as the transition 'Well, all these can some times increase...'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly with the use of 'all these' and 'that'. While there is a clear attempt to use linking words like 'On one hand' and 'On the other hand', the flow between sentences could be smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs needs more variety and precision to reach a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the range and precision required for a higher score. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'theme mates' (likely meaning 'teammates'), 'riff' (likely meaning 'rift'), and 'burst the brain' (which is an inappropriate idiom in this context). The student relies on fairly basic vocabulary and struggles with collocations. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to workplace and educational environments and practice using these words in their correct context to avoid unnatural phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'its great benefits is'), missing articles, and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'reason because i saw that'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and article usage would significantly improve the accuracy of the writing.

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