Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In the contemporary era, an indispensable role is played by teamwork without any competition. It is belied that, some people argue that competition at work, school, and in daily lives is a beneficial things, While, others think that we should try to cooperate more and improve teamwork bond rather than competing opposite each other. I will discuss both views and give my own opinion.
To embark with, individuals believe that the competitions is more significant in daily lives. They are encouraging to improve practical skills and creating productivity. Moreover, it gives me motivation and useful information about work and study throughout the world. For example, students study harder to achieve higher grades in exam and become success in the future, while employees work efficiently to earn high money and promotions.
On the other hand, cooperation helps people achieve better results and success in their life. Hence, teamwork are improving people work and positive thinking. They have improved relationship and trustworthy in the field. For example, doctors, nurses, and engineers often work together to complete difficult tasks successfully. They have been supporting for needy people because they want to do. In addition, teamwork are reducing mental stress and anxiety because they are solving problem easily with teamwork help. They have been supporting for people and sharing own ideas.
To conclude, competition and cooperate both are significant role difficult task in daily lives. In my opinion, cooperation is more beneficial because people can share own knowledge, ideas, also solve problems together, and achieve common goals.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the paragraph on competition mentions 'productivity' and 'motivation' but does not fully explore the nuances of these concepts. The arguments are presented as a list of points rather than a cohesive discussion. While the task is addressed, the supporting examples, such as 'doctors, nurses, and engineers', are generic and could be more effectively linked to the prompt's core theme of cooperation versus competition. To reach a higher band, you should aim to expand on your reasoning with more depth and specific analysis.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'To embark with', 'Moreover', and 'On the other hand'. However, some of these transitions are slightly unnatural or misused (e.g., 'To embark with' is not standard English). Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as the use of 'they' in the third paragraph, which makes it difficult to track whether you are referring to the people cooperating or the results of cooperation. Paragraphing is present, but the internal flow within paragraphs could be smoother.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You rely on basic terms like 'good thing', 'success', and 'work'. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'competing opposite each other' instead of 'competing against each other' and 'earn high money' instead of 'earn a high salary'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated or varied vocabulary limits the score. Focusing on topic-specific collocations would significantly improve your lexical range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues like 'teamwork are improving' and 'competition and cooperate both are significant role'. There are also errors with articles and prepositions, such as 'in daily lives' (should be 'in daily life') and 'become success' (should be 'become successful'). While you attempt complex sentences, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from being consistently accurate. You should focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and word form errors.
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