Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The competition is a good in think at work, school and in daily life. Other people think that we should try to a cooperate more, I talk about both view my opinions. Overall, When people compete. They try to do their best. Competing is a good think because they help for study and learn more things . competing get to many goals. Because due to competing we get mobile phones , cars and other many things . For example some people, one hand we are competing. this is a good think but If I talk about some people teach their that You go to a fight and this is a bad way. Please we go right way. we do not go to a bad way. WE Should try to a cooperate each to other.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, significantly impacting the development of ideas. While the prompt asks to discuss both views and provide an opinion, the essay is underdeveloped and lacks depth. The arguments provided, such as 'competing get to many goals', are simplistic and lack supporting evidence or logical expansion. The position is stated but not clearly sustained throughout the text. Due to the severe lack of length and the superficial nature of the arguments, the response does not adequately address the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a clear organizational structure. There is no logical progression of ideas, and the paragraphing is non-existent or inappropriate. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often inaccurate, such as the disjointed transition 'For example some people, one hand we are competing'. The lack of clear linking words makes the text difficult to follow, and the ideas appear as a series of disconnected sentences rather than a cohesive argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and word form, such as 'good think' instead of 'good thing' and 'a cooperate' instead of 'cooperate'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, and the misuse of common words often impedes the reader's understanding. There is no attempt to use less common or academic vocabulary appropriate for an IELTS Task 2 essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. There are frequent errors in sentence structure, punctuation, and basic grammar, such as 'The competition is a good in think' and 'competing get to many goals'. Subject-verb agreement and article usage are consistently problematic. The lack of complex sentence structures and the high frequency of errors make the text difficult to read and understand at times.
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