Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

A few individuals opine that competition at corporate job, academic and in day to day life is a right thing. Although, others argues that cooperate to each other is great idea. Competition in life is neccessary to upskills but also cooperation also work in place that. Both the view will be analyzed before stating my opinion at the end.

Examining the favorable reason to support the prior view. Primarily, Competition at work boost the emplyees productivity. In other words, If one employee do great work in the office anothers college should do compete with them to make best outcome from that project. Also this type of work help them in future to get promotions from works. Another ground is in the schools, collage and in classes where pupils rank them with others by their exam marks if students compete then their skills and knowledge can upscale as like race to achieve first ,second or third number in exam result. Example, as my personal experiences when i was in 12th my whole class in classes try their best to get highest marks in weekly test that develop the concern to perform very well in final exams. In the end of borad exam the results are record breaken. Hence, competition is work great in all fields as well as in day to day activities.

On the other hand, latter view hold obvious reasons too. Firstly, cooperating like teamwork also archeive hilarious outcome as different workers have variety of skills and knowledge. To be precise, We can see the workplace like IT industry, Bank and mainly in Space research office. In IT office a few developer have skill to build design when another have ability to work as backend databases both is essential to run Website and Apps semlessly without error. Apart from this, if one student have doubt and another one is geneuis in that particular subject or topic may help them to teach with proper guidence. To examplify it when i have some question in my account subject and discussed with teacher still i have problem in that but when i told to one topper girl she helped with proper steps. Hence, working together in team is very important role to win in any games, work and studies.

To conclude, in my opinion rather than competing against each other in same field i would like to work in freindly team space; however, competition is also important in daily life to perform greatest among all of competitors.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing both the benefits of competition and cooperation, and provides a clear personal opinion. The ideas are relevant and generally well-supported with examples, such as the IT industry and personal academic experiences. However, the development of ideas is occasionally hindered by imprecise language and some over-generalisation. While the position is clear, the arguments could be more sophisticated to reach a higher band. The response is balanced, but the transition between the two viewpoints and the final conclusion could be more tightly integrated to ensure a more cohesive argument.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, each with a central topic. There is a logical progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'Examining the favorable reason to support the prior view' or 'To examplify it'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and some transitions between sentences feel abrupt. While the paragraphing is appropriate, the flow of ideas is sometimes interrupted by awkward phrasing, which prevents the essay from achieving a higher score in this criterion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, but there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation that occasionally impede the reader. For example, 'record breaken' (record-breaking), 'upscale' (improve/enhance), and 'hilarious outcome' (which is misused here, as it means funny rather than excellent). There is an attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary (e.g., 'backend databases', 'productivity'), but the lack of precision and spelling errors (e.g., 'neccessary', 'emplyees', 'semlessly') limit the range. To improve, focus on using words in their correct context and refining spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there is a high frequency of grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('one employee do', 'others college should do compete'), article usage, and sentence fragments. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and punctuation require the reader to work harder to follow the text. To reach a higher band, you need to demonstrate better control over complex structures and reduce the frequency of errors in basic sentence construction.

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