Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

There are lots of people who believe competition plays a significant roles for our own betterment while others has different mind in competition, they think being cooperative minded is more beneficial to complete the task more effectively.

Most of the case at our life has competition with each others since childhood when kids got for schooling even it remain similar when the go to work at their adult life. Competition make us to do the task as perfectly as possible regardless the stage of life. If there is no competition at school, probably there will no struggles to make students them better version in particular topic. Especially, when I was kid I always afraid of Math but to make myself better position as I always dreamed of to be an engineer I focused a lot at my Math modules which is still helping my logical thinking capabilities at corporate engineering life and even my daily life. Furthermore, competition at work place always help someone to up skills there skillset and that help individuals to sustain on their position long time in this competitive world.

While there is significant benefit of competition, there is disadvantages too if the competition happens not for themself but with others. At school, I have seen lots of students wanted to be on the top of the list with their peers but they ended up with the social skills that crucial to learn at that stage. Moreover, competitive mind can make someone alone where if they have a mind of cooperation, they would probably learn the skills more quickly from others.

In conclusion, I believe competition can make someone better at every stage of life if they can do it with themselves, nevertheless cooperation always helpful if someone want to step up their knowledge with the help of others.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion in the conclusion. The ideas are relevant, such as the benefits of competition for personal growth and the potential social drawbacks. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the discussion on cooperation is brief compared to the section on competition. To reach a higher band, you should ensure that both viewpoints are explored with equal depth and provide more nuanced examples. The position is consistent, but the supporting arguments could be more thoroughly explained to demonstrate a deeper level of critical thinking.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where referencing is unclear, such as 'Most of the case at our life'. The transition between the benefits of competition and the drawbacks could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to discuss the topic, using terms like 'logical thinking capabilities', 'competitive world', and 'social skills'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choices and collocations, such as 'cooperative minded', 'up skills there skillset', and 'competition happens not for themself'. These errors occasionally make the text feel unnatural. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that you use the correct word forms (e.g., 'themselves' instead of 'themself'). Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise academic terms would also be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('others has different mind') and article usage ('at our life', 'at corporate engineering life'). Additionally, there are issues with sentence construction, such as 'Competition make us to do the task'. These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader, although they do not fully impede communication. Increasing your control over basic grammar and punctuation will help you achieve a higher score.

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