Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In our fast-pace world, Many people have arguments about their jobs and their school is a rewarding because they totally put a hardwork and time effort to achieve financial success as a prosperous person, so they are feel more under pressure and everyday feel burning out. While others believe it should necessary to build a teamworks and equality rights rathen than competing each other. In my perspective, I firmly believe supporting and collaborating is a crucial to encourage and motivate individuals to broaden their knowledge and shapes their future.

To begin with, since we are now in modernization and digital ages, People extremely believing themselves that they need to find a high salary job to sustain their needs and wants. For instance, many professionals such as doctors, teachers and engineers need to get license for better opportunities they are worth quality and more particulary high paid jobs and it is indemand in other countries as well. In school, students have a academic ranking and competitions around their classroom management because they want to showcase their talents and get the academic rewards to makin. To illustrate, people eager to learn and broaden their knowledge as a result of their victory and it is highly accomplishment.

In other hand, while others have a mutually supportive, they respect for each other to build trust because it has a strong sense of community. For example, in the Philippines we are well known as a hospitable and selfless. We helping without expecting anything back instead of competing each other. A wide range number of Filipinos graduated in both bachelors degree and vocational are same because they both hardworking and determining their wants to faught the poverty and high cost of living.

In conclusion, there are several drawbacks of having competition in our works and school for the common good. However, having a incredibly supporting and understing by each other makes our life easier and more successful in the future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you mention the benefits of competition and cooperation, the supporting arguments are often vague or lack logical depth. For instance, the paragraph on competition mentions doctors and engineers but does not clearly link these to the broader concept of competition versus cooperation. The conclusion is also somewhat disconnected from the body paragraphs, as it introduces the idea of 'drawbacks' which were not explicitly discussed in the main text. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-explained idea supported by a clear example.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression between and within them is often weak. The use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or misused, such as 'In other hand' and 'A wide range number of Filipinos'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your argument. While there is an attempt to use transition signals, they are not always used appropriately to connect ideas effectively. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will significantly enhance the clarity of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'fast-pace world' (fast-paced), 'prosperous person' (used incorrectly), and 'faught the poverty' (fought). You attempt to use some academic vocabulary, but the lack of precision often obscures your intended meaning. To reach a higher band, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that words are used in their correct grammatical form. Expanding your range of vocabulary beyond basic terms will also help you express your ideas with more nuance and precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('Many people have arguments... is a rewarding'), sentence structure ('so they are feel more under pressure'), and word forms ('it should necessary'). While you attempt some complex structures, they are often grammatically incorrect. The majority of your sentences contain errors, which prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of auxiliary verbs, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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