Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others people that we should try to cooperate more, I discuss both views and my opinion. One one hand compete can be good . When people compete, they try to do their best . In work, school and study hard to get the highest marks. This think help the study and competition make better the upper level. Competition gave motivate to the people . Due to this think now many companies get the upper position. Overall, cooperate most important think for all peoples because cooperate save to the people for bad thinks , bad way and with many thinks . Most people do not cooperate which in vole stress, depression but that people cooperate eac

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 132 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address both sides of the argument and mentions a personal opinion, the discussion is extremely superficial and lacks the necessary depth, supporting examples, and logical extension required for an academic task. The conclusion is incomplete and trails off, meaning the task is only partially addressed. To improve, you must expand your arguments with specific examples and ensure the essay reaches the required length to allow for a full exploration of the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are disjointed and lack logical progression. Cohesive devices are almost entirely absent, making the text feel like a collection of fragmented sentences rather than a cohesive argument. The transition between the discussion of competition and cooperation is abrupt, and the final paragraph is unfinished, which disrupts the overall flow. To improve, use linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in contrast' to connect your ideas and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence followed by supporting points.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. Basic terms like 'good', 'think', and 'people' are used frequently, which restricts the ability to express complex ideas. There are also significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'competition gave motivate' instead of 'competition provides motivation' and 'in vole' (likely intended as 'involve'). The lack of range prevents the communication of nuanced arguments. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to education, business, and social interaction, and practice using synonyms to avoid repetition.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is highly inaccurate, with frequent errors that often impede meaning. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'competition gave motivate'), word order, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or incomplete, such as 'Others people that we should try to cooperate more'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the basic sentences present are often grammatically flawed. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb-object patterns, and proofread your work to correct simple errors in tense and word form.

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