Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In recent years, competitions play a significant role in individual's life. A group of people think that, competitions are essential in each and every sectors such as, school, employment and other day to day life. While, others are counterclaimed that, sometimes people should manage themselves, instead of compete with others. In my opinion, competitions get first priority to the people, because it get better opportunities to individuals.

Firstly, there are enormous benefits to take part in the various competitions, weather in jobs or in education. Competitions in education, it may cause plenty of advantages to the students, because schools should not only provide a trophy to the scholar students, but also they give scholarships as well. These type of activities are very helpful to get better in hundreds of pupils. Another positive aspect is, competitions in the job field. It is also get a good opportunity to the people, who worked in the companies. To cite an example, as per the survey of times of India, the number of competitions has been increased in recent years in schools and jobs as well. In concur with this view.

Secondly, some people believe that, competitions are not necessary in each every sector, due to increasing competitions are invite the number of crimes. Sometimes citizens create severe offense. For instance, As per the research about the Oxford University, the ratio of criminals was increased 20% in 2020. People should try to cooperate in certain situations. Still i do not concur with this view.

In my opinion, the brighter side overshadows the darker side, because there are numbers of politicians, who misuse their positions. As a consequence, at that moment competition provide equalities to each and every people.

To conclude, competition has multiple positive outcomes. Because it is an important part of human being. Competitions gave similar opportunities to everyone and sometimes it encourage the people to achieve a difficult task.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the argument regarding competition leading to crime is introduced but lacks a logical connection to the prompt, and the example cited (Oxford University research) is vague and not clearly linked to the topic. While the position is consistent, the supporting arguments would benefit from more depth and clearer logical progression to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'To conclude'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'In concur with this view' or 'Still i do not concur with this view', which disrupts the flow. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the transition between ideas within paragraphs could be smoother to improve the overall logical progression.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'competitions are invite the number of crimes' and 'competitions get first priority'. The range of vocabulary is limited, and the student relies on repetitive phrasing. To improve, the student should focus on using more academic collocations and ensuring that words are used in their correct grammatical context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('competitions play', 'it get better'), article usage, and incorrect verb forms ('competitions are invite'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable and affect the overall clarity of the writing.

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