Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the recent time, many person believe that competition at work, at school or in a daily life is beneficial things while others argue that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other and further arguments in following paragraph.
In the view of competition at work is beneficial things, competition is very good things to sharp our talent more and more because it makes you to push your limit and be better from the rival to exceed them and gain more talent by practice more and more in day to day life. In addition the it will give your frame and make superior in the team or in the game due to that it builds more confident in the person so he can do anything in there life which can give your frame and make superior in the team or with own peers.For instance, study in the france illustrates that the person who always involve in competition have higher iq level rather than who cooperate them self in their life.
In the view of cooperate rather than competing against each other, competition is unhealthy if there is friends against each other because if the friends compete each other their bond should may lose and the became the rival in real life which can lead to the huge issues in the life. for illustrates researcher from nepal showed that competing to each others ie huge drawbacks from them. In addition competition can lead you to stress due to that you try to the level up daily and push your limit and if you not success in the life you will go the black zone.
In conclusion, competition is beneficial for to increase the the level of your iq and to make the name and frame in the team while competition with friends may be unhealthy in day to day life .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, satisfying the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding competition and cooperation are repetitive and lack depth. For instance, the claim that competition increases IQ is an unsupported generalisation, and the explanation of 'black zone' is vague. The position is clear, but the supporting points are not fully extended or logically explored, which prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. To improve, you should focus on providing more specific, logical explanations for your claims rather than repeating the same points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'In the view of' are used incorrectly to introduce paragraphs, and the transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the use of 'the' before 'france' or 'the' before 'nepal'. While there is an overall progression, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the repetitive nature of the sentence structures make the flow feel somewhat disjointed. Improving the variety and accuracy of your transition signals will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and often repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'good things', 'do', and 'life'. There are also several instances of incorrect word choice and collocation, such as 'sharp our talent', 'give your frame', and 'cooperate them self'. Some words are used in ways that do not fit the context, which occasionally makes the meaning difficult to follow. To achieve a higher score, you need to move beyond basic vocabulary and focus on using more precise, academic language and correct collocations. Expanding your range of synonyms and learning how to use them in context is essential.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('many person believe', 'competition... are'), article misuse ('in the france', 'the researcher'), and awkward sentence construction. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. For example, 'if the friends compete each other their bond should may lose' contains multiple errors in modal usage and structure. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. To improve, you must focus on mastering basic sentence structures and ensuring subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex grammatical forms.
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