Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Its a opinion that totally depends upon the perspective of each individual. Every people on earth has different perspective and they have different views on different things.
In some people perspective competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Because that competition push them to work hard , work extra and to do more things to become more successful than other. They think the competitive environment gives them extra motivation to be better than other. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. They believe that helping each other makes works easier. That type of people is friendly in nature and wants to cooperate with other for problems solving.
In my opinion, every individual should posses the both mindset to become extra and successful. In my perspective both view are important and we should follow them partially. Taking as my one relevant example during my internship period at Equagen Engineer PLLC. After the graduation one company Equagen Engineer PLLC comes to our college for hiring the fresher. They select 4 student including me during internship and they only hire only 2 of us as per our performance. So at that scenario we should be cooperate with other to complete the whole assign work at the same time we should be also competitive with other to standout. So for me both these views helps every individual to be successful in life.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing both competition and cooperation and providing a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you provide a personal example regarding your internship, the explanation of why competition or cooperation is beneficial remains quite general. To achieve a higher band, you should expand on the 'why' and 'how' behind these concepts, perhaps by discussing the long-term impacts on professional growth or team dynamics. Your position is clear throughout, but the supporting arguments could be more thoroughly explored to demonstrate a deeper level of critical thinking.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. For example, you frequently start sentences with 'They believe' or 'In my perspective'. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words and transition phrases such as 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'on the other hand' to connect your ideas more fluidly. Additionally, some referencing is slightly unclear, such as 'That type of people', which would be better phrased as 'Such individuals'.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. You rely on basic terms like 'good thing' and 'different', which limits the sophistication of your writing. There are also some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'posses the both mindset' (should be 'possess both mindsets') and 'assign work' (should be 'assigned work'). To improve, focus on using more academic collocations and synonyms to express your ideas more precisely.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('Every people on earth has', 'both view are important') and article usage ('the both mindset'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to impact the overall fluency. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and pluralization, and try to incorporate more complex sentence structures with greater accuracy.
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