Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
There is an ongoing debate regarding human interaction plays an important role in people's lives. A group of individuals believe that competition is beneficial in different areas of life. However, others argue that cooperation should be encouraged instead. Therefore ahead of my opinion, I agree both views will be discussed further.
Examining the former opinion, the primary argument the supporters would put forward is better lifestyle. This is because competition helps to strengthen the life. It assists to clear communication and present your idea in a smart way. In addition, they also believe that competition is a crucial part in our lives. it provides many differences skills person and non-skills person. Consequently, competition important in every filed of life it provides intelligent students employees.
On the contrary, those in favour of the later opinion have their own arguments. To begin with, they claim that competition are not necessary in every field because many people demotivated and underestimate. Many individuals believe that we should try to cooperate sector rather than to competing against each others. Furthermore competition in cooperate sector helps to achieved they goals and rise incentive.
To conclude and offer may position, there are convincing compelling arguments both for and against competition at job, school and daily life is essential rather than to cooperate. however, i certainly favour the former opinion.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you address both sides of the argument and state a position, the ideas are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting evidence or examples. For instance, the claim that competition 'helps to strengthen the life' is vague and not explained. The conclusion is also abrupt and does not effectively summarize the main points. To improve, you must expand on your arguments with specific examples and ensure you meet the length requirement to allow for a full discussion of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is often disjointed. While you use some cohesive devices like 'In addition' and 'On the contrary', their usage is sometimes mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'Therefore ahead of my opinion'. The progression of ideas within paragraphs is weak; for example, the second paragraph jumps between ideas about communication and 'non-skills person' without a clear logical link. Improving the use of transition words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would greatly enhance the readability and logical flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms and struggle with word choice and collocation. Phrases like 'non-skills person' and 'rise incentive' are unnatural and impede clarity. There are also instances where the wrong word is used, such as 'filed' instead of 'field' and 'later' instead of 'latter'. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning topic-specific collocations and using a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas with more precision and sophistication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally make the meaning difficult to follow. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'competition are not necessary' and 'many people demotivated'. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'there are convincing compelling arguments both for and against competition at job, school and daily life is essential'. You need to focus on basic sentence construction, verb forms, and ensuring that your sentences are grammatically complete and accurate.
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