Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Nowadays, individuals consider competiton is necessary in occupation, eduction and in regular routine. While other people consider we should need to cooperate with each other for do better in life. I completely agree with second statment. I will discuss reasons in further essay.
To begin with the one of the major reason of first satment. People thing competition is more crucial to grow in life. Because, due to competition people do more struggle to stay and come first in life. Therefore, they sometime do more better than others. In addition, it is easy to archieve goals or aims in life. Because, due to competition people completely focus on their goals and do more struggle to archieve more than onthers as well as they do not distract from their aims. For example, I observed to my little brother, he do more competiton to his friends for archieve highest marks in all subjects and for that, he regularly do more struggle on his study.
On the other hand, some individuals consider try cooperate to others more better than competition. firstly, They think, due to cooperation people do more better on their occupation, education and other aspects. Therefore, they give good result and being positive impact on their life. As well as easily archieve goals without any stress of competiton. Furthermore, due to cooperation, people learn hoe to work with team. And, they learn more new skills with their partners. Therefore, people do not need to excesive struggle for competition and easily archieve goal or aim. For instance, I tried to cooperate with my classmates and we worked on perticuldue to better team work, I succesfully completed my project. And got positive results in my project.
In my opinion, I completely agree with the given second statment. Because, competition is not nessessary in our life to archieve goal. And cooprate and team work is more important to become succesfull in life.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive and lacks depth. For instance, the arguments for competition focus almost exclusively on 'struggling to come first,' and the arguments for cooperation rely heavily on 'achieving goals without stress.' While the task is addressed, the supporting points are simplistic and lack the nuance required for a higher band. The position is consistent, but the explanation of why cooperation is superior could be more sophisticated, moving beyond basic statements about team work.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical and sometimes inaccurate. Phrases like 'To begin with the one of the major reason' and 'Therefore, they give good result' show a limited ability to link ideas smoothly. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the transition between sentences feels repetitive due to the frequent use of 'Therefore' and 'Because' at the start of sentences. The logical flow is present but requires more varied linking words to achieve a higher level of cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors such as 'competiton', 'eduction', 'archieve', 'perticul', and 'nessessary', which occasionally impede readability. The range of vocabulary is narrow, relying on basic words like 'good', 'better', and 'struggle'. There is little evidence of less common lexical items or an awareness of collocation. To improve, you should focus on learning synonyms for common words and practicing the correct spelling of academic vocabulary. The current level is sufficient to convey basic meaning but lacks the precision and variety needed for a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'he do more competiton'), incorrect word forms (e.g., 'being positive impact'), and missing articles or prepositions. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar structures prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects and that sentence fragments are avoided.
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