Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

While it is often argued that, competition in daily life such as at work, at school is good, others contend that we ought to try to be more cooperative with each other. From my perspective, I inclined to agree that, competing with each other brings more success in our lives.

There is an opinion that, while competing, we feel challenges which ultimately brings more outcome from a person, and I completely believe that. For instance, in school, when good students in a group show competitiveness, they always try to overcome others by doing better result. This type of competition helps students to move forward with others in the same curriculum and environment. That is why, players like Messi and Ronaldo always felt pressure when others scored or got awards, which led them to tried to be better than past, which eventually made both of them great players. Some individuals also consider that, we, human being, are made to follow others. We can be lacked behind and can not measure success when we work alone. That is why, a children learns well in a school rather than in home. School environment help a child to learn, to compete. Therefore, it is needed to have a competitive mentality in order to make progress in our lives.

By contrast, those who disagree believe that, cooperation brings more success. Some consider that, it brings more achievements in life when we do a work combinely. For instance, a research shows that, in a company, when employees work together in a healthy environment, it eventually brings a lot more success than the employees who works in a competitive environment and show selfishness. Each employees have different skill and if they share their knowledge, it will be beneficial for all. There is another opinion that, life is not a place of competition. We should support others who are lacked behind. Such as, if a family member is poor and can not operate his or her family, it is our responsibility to help them instead of ignoring them or moving forward without them.

Summing up, while people may vary their opinions, I consider, daily competition in every aspect of life brings more success in student life as well as, in office.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing both competition and cooperation before providing a clear personal opinion. The ideas are relevant and generally well-supported with examples, such as the reference to Messi and Ronaldo or the mention of corporate teamwork. However, some arguments are slightly over-generalized, such as the claim that children learn better in school than at home, which lacks nuance. The position is consistent throughout the essay, and the conclusion effectively summarizes the writer's stance. To reach a higher band, ensure that all supporting examples are fully developed and avoid minor logical leaps.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two opposing views. Cohesive devices are present, such as 'For instance', 'By contrast', and 'Therefore', though some transitions feel slightly mechanical or repetitive. Referencing is generally clear, although there are occasional instances where the flow is slightly hindered by awkward phrasing, such as 'Some individuals also consider that, we, human being, are made to follow others.' Overall, the progression of ideas is easy to follow, and the structure supports the reader's understanding of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the intended meaning, with some attempts at less common items like 'competitiveness', 'curriculum', and 'beneficial'. However, there are several instances of inaccurate word choice and collocation errors, such as 'do a work combinely' (instead of 'work collaboratively'), 'lacked behind' (instead of 'lag behind'), and 'operate his or her family' (instead of 'provide for'). These errors do not impede communication, but they indicate a need for more precise control over word forms and collocations to reach a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the writer attempts complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('Each employees have', 'employees who works') and verb tense/form ('led them to tried', 'a children learns'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas frequently interrupting the flow of sentences. While these errors rarely impede the overall meaning, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tense usage would significantly improve the accuracy of the writing.

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