Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

i agree with these people who thought that compitation at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. because when human are in participate in competition they work hard and give his work to 100 percent. they thought if they work lose and easy than he lose the competions and other particpants are work hard he give the position in own feild and in life when they work in competition they give more chance to his on work when he lost the one thing he feels the good and he get up to the another competitions.

and who belives that we should try to cooperate more rather than competing against each other they never gives the oprchounity for his work and they fails in any feild and his own life and face the problems if they work in comprtitions he gives more good things and more successfull life to others

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 153 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to address both sides of the argument and state an opinion, the ideas are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting examples or depth. The discussion of the opposing view is particularly brief and lacks clarity. To improve, you must expand your arguments with specific examples and ensure you meet the length requirement to allow for a full exploration of the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no introduction or conclusion, and the response is presented in two very short, poorly organized paragraphs. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and often inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'and' to connect ideas. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow because the sentences are disjointed and lack logical flow. To improve, you should use clear paragraphing (introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion) and employ a wider range of linking words like 'furthermore', 'however', or 'consequently' to connect your thoughts more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'compitation' instead of 'competition', 'oprchounity' instead of 'opportunity', and 'comprtitions' instead of 'competitions'. The word choice is often imprecise, making it difficult to convey your intended meaning clearly. To improve, you need to focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic terms and expanding your vocabulary to include more precise synonyms and collocations related to the topic of work and education.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'human are in participate', 'they never gives'), pronoun usage (e.g., 'give his work'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, making the text difficult to read. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the basic sentences used are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and pronouns before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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