Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In this modern word, people has becoming more competitive especially at work, at school even their daily life. While, some people argue that competition can lead great achievement for people life however, i believe that it can lead certian benefits
WITH JELOUSEY CONCEQUENCES AND MAY CAN LEAD WIKER RELATIONSHIP BETWEEN INDIVIDUELS.
ON THE ONE HAND, COMPETITION IS FUNDAMENTAL FOR ACHIVEMENT OF DESIRE GOAL, WITH DEVELOPMENT OF WORK SKILLS. COMPETITION AT WORKPLACE CAN LEAD SIGNIFICANT GROWTH IN COMPANY INCOME AND CAN DO BETTER WORK FOR PROMOTION AND AT SCHOOL STUDENTS MAY DO BETTER IN THEIR ACADEMIC ACHIEVEMENT .FOR INSTANCE, THE EDUCATION INSTITUTIONS OF NEPAL OFFER SCHOLLERSHIP FOR TOPPER STUDENT IT CAN LEAD COMPETITION BETWEEN STUDENT TO PERSUE THIS GREAT OPPOETUNITY. COMPETITION IS A BACKBONE OF SUCCESS OF PEOPLE WITHOUT ANY PRESSUR AND GOAL PEOPLE BE LIKE A MONKEY .
ON THE OTHER HAND, IT HAS ALSO SOME DRAWBACKS .FIRSTLY, PEOPLE CAN FOCUS ONLY ON THEM THEYDONT CARE ABOUT OTHERS AND BECOME WEAK RELATIONSHIPS. IT CAN ALSO LEADS ENIMITY BETWEEN PEOPLE EVEN A CLOSE ONE . FOR INSTANCE, AT A WORK PLACE IN A SOME CASE SOME ENPLOYMENT FOLLOW A NEGATIVE RUMMERS ABOUT THEIR OPPONENTS IN THEIR BOSS AND THEY MAY LOSS THEIR JOB.AT SCHOOL SOME STUDENT CAN CATCHING WITH CHEATING WHY IS THIS HAPPEN ? BECAUSE THEY WANT TO DO BETTER THAN OTHERS AND WANT TO GET A EDUCATION OPPORTUNITY BUT IT CAN LEAD HUGE NEGATIVE IMPACTS ON THEIR FUTURE. EVE
IN CONCLUSION, COMPETITION IS A KEY WAY TO BE A SUCESSFUL PERSON AND MAKE A GOOD REPUTATION ON SOCIETY. HOWEVER SOME PEOPLE CHOOSE EASSY AND FAST WAY TO BECOME A BETTER PERSON AND CAN LEAD INSUFFICENTS AND DENGER PROBLEM AND SOME PEOPLE DON'T HAGITATE TO COMMITE CRIME . THEREFOR BALANCE APPROACH ARE EFFECTIVE SOLUTION.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While the benefits of competition are touched upon, the discussion on the drawbacks is somewhat disjointed and relies on generalizations. The conclusion introduces new, slightly off-topic ideas about crime and 'denger problems' which were not previously discussed, rather than summarizing the main points. To improve, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea that directly supports your position, and ensure the conclusion remains focused on the arguments already presented.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate (e.g., 'FOR INSTANCE', 'THEREFOR'). The flow between sentences is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, making the progression of ideas feel disjointed. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between the two sides of the argument lacks sophistication. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that each sentence logically follows from the previous one to create a smoother narrative flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'JELOUSEY', 'CONCEQUENCES', 'WIKER', 'ENIMITY', 'RUMMERS', and 'HAGITATE'. These errors, combined with incorrect word choices (e.g., 'do better work' instead of 'improve performance'), occasionally impede communication. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas with precision. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic words and practice using collocations—words that naturally go together—rather than translating directly from your first language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people has becoming', 'some employment follow'), article usage, and sentence structure. The use of capitalization for entire sections is inappropriate for formal writing. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, these are often marred by errors, such as 'MAY CAN LEAD' or 'SOME STUDENT CAN CATCHING'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and tense consistency, before attempting more complex structures. Proofreading for basic punctuation and capitalization is also essential.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.