Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Peoples have different views on competition whether at work or school and also in daily lives. While competing with others we can get our mental and physical performance can be stronger. While some other people believe that cooperation is much pivotal than against competition.

On the one hand, Competition will help us from fear and emotional back drops and also gives boost our self confidence in daily office or schools with following personal life. Moreover, competition teach how to survive in failures and to get succeed. For example, while u perform better in employment easily get promotions as well as better life possibilities and also students perform better in schools its lead to greater competition with others it will helps to better carrier Opportunity and Goals.

On the other hand, Cooperation is much essential in daily life because most of the goal we cannot succeed invidually, it causes heavy stress and health complications. For instance, most of the scientists help each other to discover the new drugs and also shares the crucial information for other countries to save the peoples. As well as I am representing another example ISRO creates a successful record, a rocket landing south side on the moon. For this many scientists worked together and success. However, working with cooperation it creates a healthy environment and valued by everyone.

In my opinion both Competing and cooperation is much important in human life. Healthy competition inspires us to do best, and teamwork helps us to growth to next level for better future.

In conclusion, although competing can encourage hard work and ambition, working together builds stronger relationships and helps us solve bigger problems. Therefore, we should focus more on cooperation in our daily lives.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the argument regarding competition helping with 'fear and emotional back drops' is vague and lacks clear explanation. Similarly, the example of ISRO is relevant but the explanation of how it relates to the broader concept of cooperation is slightly disjointed. While the prompt is fully addressed, the supporting points would benefit from more depth and logical elaboration to reach a higher band. The position is consistent throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'On the one hand', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'As well as I am representing another example'. Additionally, referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the phrase 'with following personal life' which lacks a clear antecedent. The progression of ideas is generally logical, but the flow between sentences could be smoother to improve the overall coherence of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choices or non-standard collocations, such as 'much pivotal', 'better life possibilities', and 'carrier Opportunity'. The student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary (e.g., 'promotions', 'scientists', 'cooperation'), but the overall control is inconsistent. To improve, the student should focus on learning more natural collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing like 'better' and 'perform better'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'competition teach', 'both Competing and cooperation is'), incorrect article usage, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'whether at work or school and also in daily lives'). While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. More attention to proofreading for singular/plural consistency and verb forms is needed.

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