Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Few individual believe that being a competitive employe at educational institution and in daily matters is supposed to be a healthy activity.Many people think that a helping environment is better than try to compete one another.In this essay ,I will give my opinion by comparison of both aspects why it seems to be positive or negative for both activity.

According to the given situation,on works place a competitive environment always brings a positive change in workers skill,because when that put their efforts to learn something it groom then in their professional skills and bring them in a market,but some people get panic because of lot pressure and they become fall in complex that might be they are not enough capable to do job ,that' s not true ,So it always observe be a good example ,like in a banking profession when someone try to tackle marketing skill and problems on their own ,he will gain an excellent opportunity to do job on other place as well,that's why It always comes positive outcomes being an competitive employe.

On the other hand ,when people do help one another in their jobs it makes job easy and make healthy environment for all the workers .The reason is that it reduce the pressure level from owner side and complex of failure.Fir example for a new employe on work place to mange task feel difficult,if the senior staff guide them they can find direction easily and can do their task on time.This give them confidence and ease to do job .That's why it consider as a healthy environment.

In my opinion there should be a short period of training for new employe,after that they should do their job to get professional skills on their own,because competent environment always produce the best workers .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention that competition improves skills and cooperation reduces pressure, the arguments are repetitive and lack depth. For instance, the example of the banking profession is a good start, but the explanation of why it leads to positive outcomes is slightly unclear due to grammatical issues. To improve, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a distinct, well-supported point rather than repeating the same general idea about 'healthy environments' or 'complexes'.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'According to the given situation' do not fit the context well, and the transition between ideas within paragraphs is sometimes abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'that's not true, So it always observe be a good example'. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') would help create a smoother flow between your arguments and examples.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'competitive employe' (should be 'employee'), 'groom then' (should be 'groom them'), and 'become fall in complex'. These errors occasionally make the meaning difficult to grasp. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing. Expanding your range to include more academic vocabulary related to the workplace and social dynamics would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('Few individual believe'), incorrect verb forms ('try to compete one another'), and punctuation errors. Sentence structures are often simple or run-on, which limits the range of complex structures demonstrated. While the meaning is generally understandable, the persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction impede the flow of the text. Focusing on sentence boundaries and ensuring that subjects and verbs agree will significantly improve the clarity and quality of your writing.

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