Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Several individuals are of the thought that competition at work, at school, and in everyday life is a nice thing. While others are of the opinion that we should try to collaborate more, instead of competing amongst one another. This essay will discuss why it is good to compete in school, work and all day life, and why we should cooperate more.
On the one hand, a healthy competition in school can be a motivating factor. This is because, when students compete to achieve a task, this will push the individual to extreem and therefore will help bring out the best of the person. For example, when students are given a topic to read and present in the class, each and everyone of them will strive to be the best presenter. Furthermore, competing in the work place will encourage teamwork. The reason behind this is that when employees are working together for the same organizational goal, it will help the individual to work together with other employees and will equally give the person opportunity to learn.
On the other hand, cooperation is very vital in the lives of individual. Cooperation can help an individual develop a good communication skill, the reason behind this is that, when individuals cooperates more, they tend to express themselves more because they are comfortable with the people around them. Additionally, cooperation brings good results. For instance when individuals workplaces collaborates, any task given to them will meet success and achieve good results.
In conclusion, competition in work places, schools and everyday life can help bring out the best in an individual and equally be a motivation to the person, however, cooperation is equally vital.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The essay addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear, albeit brief, personal opinion in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the argument that competition encourages teamwork is stated but not fully explained or supported with a concrete example. The points regarding cooperation are also quite general. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your reasoning with more specific illustrations and ensure your position is clearly stated in the introduction, rather than just mentioning that the essay will discuss the topics.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, and there is a progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. You use some cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'Additionally'. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly repetitive, such as 'the reason behind this is that', which appears twice. The referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect ideas more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You rely on basic phrasing like 'nice thing' and 'good results'. There are also some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'all day life' (should be 'everyday life') and 'extreem' (spelling error). To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'incentivize', 'collaborative environment', or 'professional development', and ensure accurate spelling throughout.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical inaccuracies. For example, 'Several individuals are of the thought' is unnatural, and 'when individuals workplaces collaborates' contains subject-verb agreement errors. There are also issues with pluralization and article usage, such as 'a good communication skill' (should be 'good communication skills'). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score.
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