Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In this current era of scientific and technological progress, We find ourselves in the modern world, Where some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is good thing, Other believes that we should try to cooperate more, Rather than competing against each other, It is crucial that different people have different mindsets, level of understanding, different perceptions, and level of intelligence regarding this given statement, Their are types of groups, Group A and Group B, According to group A, Competition at work, At school, And in daily life is good thing, Because according their point of view this competition is positive and help persons to grow more in dynamic environment, On the other hand, Group B, The competition at work, At school, and in daily life is not healthy, Because according to their point of view, This type of competition sometimes make stress on a persons mind, they believe that rather then comparing, Or making competition, Always support each other in every possible way, And cooperate with each other to grow together, And the growth in teamwork, And with mutual understandings is always very rapid, Because every member of the team try their best to solve problems to achieve their best at every level, I support the opinion of Group-B, Because now a days, Team work is very important to do any thing in most of aspects in life, The productivity of positive mindset's team is 10x then the team, Which make competition with each other.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is quite limited. The essay relies on a repetitive structure ('Group A' and 'Group B') rather than exploring the nuances of competition versus cooperation in depth. The arguments provided are somewhat superficial, and the essay lacks specific, concrete examples to support the claims. While the task is addressed, the lack of depth and the reliance on a very basic framework prevent it from reaching a higher band score. To improve, you should expand on your points with real-world examples and more sophisticated reasoning.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks proper paragraphing, consisting of only one long block of text. This makes it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of ideas. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices (e.g., 'On the other hand', 'Because'), they are often used incorrectly or in a mechanical way. The flow is hindered by the lack of clear topic sentences and logical transitions between the introduction, the body, and the conclusion. Improving your paragraph structure and using a wider variety of linking words more naturally would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'good thing' and 'help persons to grow' are used multiple times, and there is a lack of academic or topic-specific vocabulary. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'make stress on a persons mind' instead of 'cause stress' or 'place pressure on'. The range of vocabulary is limited, and the essay does not demonstrate the ability to use less common lexical items effectively. To improve, focus on learning synonyms and collocations related to the topic of workplace and educational dynamics.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are significant issues with punctuation, particularly the overuse of commas and the lack of full stops, which results in run-on sentences. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent (e.g., 'Other believes', 'every member of the team try'). Additionally, there is a lack of complex sentence structures; most sentences are simple or poorly connected. The frequent errors in basic grammar, such as article usage ('a persons mind') and capitalization, indicate a need for a stronger focus on fundamental grammatical accuracy.
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