Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, enormous tell that majority all the competition at both work and school it a beneficial thing in their daily life. While, other bhelive that try to cooperate more, rather than competing against opposite person. i will discuss both the view given below.

To commence, many adults today says that children have to taken a competition in both their job and school. However, today youngster are taking a opportunity in the competition. in spite of, humans were taking a part so it will be motivated to win the task and also one major benefit that exercise also were been doing in the competition. For Instance, in Japan, many Resident are taking a part in the activity in a daily life. Therefore, all the people today think that all the person have to work and at school are making beneficial role.

on the other hand, many experts tell that citizen should have to cooperate more in studies and achieve a good score. Moreover, many Indians' Father are not giving permission to take a part in the competition rather than aways say to try hard in Studies. For Example, in INDIA, many Father today are giving the role to play in front of public to over came their fear.

To Conclusion, in many Country Government should have to make much more competition so humankind take part in their daily life rather than also the education it most important in our daily routine, In my opinion, students and adults both have to take part in all task for their better skill due to competing against each other on it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is limited and often unclear. For example, the argument regarding competition in Japan is vague and does not clearly explain how it relates to the prompt. Similarly, the points about Indian fathers are anecdotal and lack a clear connection to the broader debate on competition versus cooperation. The position is stated, but the supporting arguments are underdeveloped, leading to a superficial discussion that struggles to fully explore the complexities of the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is frequently inaccurate or mechanical. Phrases like 'To commence' and 'In spite of' are used incorrectly or in contexts where they do not logically link the sentences. Referencing is also problematic; for instance, the transition 'Therefore, all the people today think...' does not follow logically from the preceding sentence about Japan. The lack of clear logical flow makes it difficult for the reader to follow the writer's line of reasoning throughout the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'enormous tell that majority all the competition' and 'over came their fear'. The writer struggles to express ideas precisely, often using words that do not fit the context, such as 'resident' instead of 'citizens' or 'people'. While the meaning is generally discernible, the lack of control over vocabulary and the frequent misuse of basic terms significantly hinder the sophistication of the response. A wider range of vocabulary is needed to move beyond a basic level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('many adults today says'), tense usage ('exercise also were been doing'), and sentence structure ('in spite of, humans were taking a part'). Complex sentence structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, leading to confusion. Simple sentences are also prone to errors in articles and prepositions. While the reader can generally understand the intended message, the high frequency of errors throughout the text indicates a lack of control over basic grammatical structures.

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