Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In this fast paced society many public believe that competition at work, at school, and in the daily life is beneficial. But others think that we should to gather and cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. I will share my own opinion on my both views with an appropriate examples.
Competing at work, school or in daily life is some kind of good for achievement in their life. Some of the time most of individuals encourages by those people who were choose to compete each other to get more success in their life. In my perspective it is a good motivation for public who like to take some challenges in their life to succussed. Because competition make person straight forward to achieve their desire for their career .For intense some children notice their peers while studying and copy the technics of studying and use the same method to get good score in their results. Therefore I, think it is a good way to influence those person who really want to compete and get good results in their life.
In some case others believe that cooperating is more useful than competing with each others against. Because sometimes most of the task or work need the community to complete. So I think it would be better while gathering with each other to finish the duty. For example its make more convenient of organization work, it built the strong bond between co-works. Since I would prefer to stay together and cooperate with each other rather than competing.
In conclusion, competition in some activities made the life forward but I think building cooperation with each other is far more better to every individuals to get success in their life and make the life easier and happy.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the explanation of competition is quite brief and relies on a simplistic example of students copying techniques. The discussion on cooperation is also underdeveloped, lacking specific, real-world examples to support the claim that it builds stronger bonds. While the prompt is addressed, the arguments lack the depth and analytical rigor required for a higher band score. The ideas are relevant but need more substantial elaboration to fully explore the implications of both competition and cooperation in professional and educational settings.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'For intense' (intended as 'For instance') and 'In some case' are used incorrectly, which disrupts the flow. Additionally, the transition between ideas within paragraphs is sometimes abrupt. While there is an overall attempt at structure, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the occasional misuse of referencing (e.g., 'those person') mean that the cohesion is not always smooth or effective throughout the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'many public believe' instead of 'many people believe' and 'made the life forward' instead of 'drives progress'. The student attempts to use some academic vocabulary, but these attempts are frequently inaccurate, such as 'succussed' (likely meant 'succeed') and 'technics' (should be 'techniques'). To improve, the student needs to focus on using more precise terminology and ensuring that words are used in their correct grammatical context to convey meaning more clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('competition make person'), incorrect verb forms ('should to gather', 'most of individuals encourages'), and missing articles or incorrect pluralization ('in the daily life', 'those person'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. The student should focus on basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects and that infinitives are used correctly after modal verbs.
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