Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Some people believe that competition at duty,at school and in routine life is a better thing.While,others believe that we should again to cooperate many,rather than competing against each other.I explain that,

First of all,from my experience and knowledge,some people right think that competition at work at school and in daily life is a good thing.Because,many people who need for money in daily life.For example,home needs,children needs electric bills etc.So,my knowledge and experience,it is a right people think that competition at duty at school in routine life.This is a better thing.For example,one children who do not mponey in my pocket in school.So,the children worried because he does not buy things.So,competition at employment at school and in daily life is a better thing.

Second of all,from my exerience and knowledge,others believe that we should try to cooprate many,rather than competing against each other.This is a wrong believe that we should try to cooprate other.Because,we should try to focus on my duty at school in daily life.Because one man who cooprate to other,he does focus on my duty.And does not earn money.And who do not home need because he does not money in my pocket.So,focus on my daily work, school, is a good thing.And ignore to each other.Some people wrong believe that try to cooprate other.

In conclusion,some people right think that competition at work,at school and in daily life.And the other side,people wrong believe that we should try to cooprate more than each other.So,focus on my daily life and ignore in other life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address both sides of the argument, but the ideas are significantly underdeveloped and often unclear. The reasoning provided for competition—linking it solely to the need for money—is repetitive and fails to explore the broader implications of competition or cooperation in work and school settings. The student's position is stated but lacks logical support, and the argument becomes circular, particularly in the second paragraph where the writer suggests that cooperation prevents one from focusing on their duties. The response struggles to maintain a clear, coherent argument throughout, leading to a limited exploration of the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. There is a lack of logical progression between sentences, and the use of cohesive devices is highly repetitive and often misused (e.g., 'Because' is frequently used to start sentences where it does not function as a logical connector). Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the writer's train of thought. While there is an attempt at an introduction and conclusion, the ideas within them are disjointed and do not effectively frame the essay.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic, often inaccurate phrasing such as 'competition at duty' instead of 'workplace competition' and 'wrong believe' instead of 'incorrect belief'. There is a lack of variety, and the misuse of words frequently impedes clarity. The student struggles to express complex ideas due to a restricted range of vocabulary, often repeating the same phrases throughout the text. To improve, the student needs to focus on learning collocations and more precise terminology related to professional and academic environments.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often cause difficulty for the reader. There are persistent issues with sentence structure, including fragments and run-on sentences. Subject-verb agreement, article usage, and word order are frequently incorrect (e.g., 'one children who do not mponey in my pocket'). The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences that are often poorly constructed. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. These errors are pervasive and significantly hinder the overall readability of the essay.

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