Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Most of the people think that competitions at work and school in daily life is a good thing, However the we should try to more, rather than competing against each other.
Overall, the most of the individuals can think that competition at work, school daily life is a good thing also cooperate more than competing against each other.
some people think that competition is good thing daily life such as work and school, in work the competition between employee to complete task intime, enhance skills used improve further high salary or role like HR, Manager, Client, weather in school competition between their friends in the examinations, playing games, dance it was a good thing in daily life, A good example that competition between friends in the exams one person got high, another person got drop in the next exams the two people git same marks by that children can improve their Knowledge, which is used for the higher educations however in company people has under role and high packages to rise their value in the socitey.
Other believe that cooperate more, rather than competing, while competing people has interest to do the work strength and skills, For example the cooperate has only one company easy to enhance the role, position but outside competion was overall the world, hard to gain value of position, salary jobs like post office, banking.
In conclusion, the competition is a good thing at work and school buy those things they gain more knowledge weather cooperate more rather than competing, competition was inside the whole company hits different, world competing is different they had government jobs like banking, police, teacher, In my opinion competition is good things all four major stages involves in at work, school, cooperate.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address both views regarding competition versus cooperation in work, school, and daily life, and briefly states an opinion in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is limited and disjointed. For instance, the discussion of competition at work mentions enhancing skills and salaries, but the supporting examples are tangled and difficult to follow. The ideas tend to be repetitive and lack clear extension, leading to an overall impression of under-developed arguments. While all parts of the prompt are touched upon, the lack of clarity and structured development places this response at Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organizational structure of the essay is severely compromised by a lack of logical progression and poor paragraphing. The introduction and body paragraphs contain repetitive phrasing, such as copying entire chunks of the prompt and opening ideas multiple times. Cohesive devices are used inappropriately or mechanically, with conjunctions and transition markers like 'weather', 'buy', and 'hits different' failing to connect ideas logically. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it very difficult for the reader to follow the train of thought. These issues align with the characteristics of a Band 4 performance.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and often misused, which significantly strains the reader. Examples include substituting 'whether' with 'weather' and using phrases like 'hits different' or 'git same marks'. The range of vocabulary is limited, and attempts to use less common items—such as 'socitey' and 'educations'—are hampered by frequent spelling and word-choice errors. While some topic-related words like 'competition', 'cooperate', 'salary', and 'examinations' are present, the pervasive errors in formation and collocation mean the lexical profile sits at Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple, error-prone sentence structures. The response is characterized by a complete breakdown of basic sentence architecture, run-on sentences, and severe punctuation errors (e.g., comma splices like 'However the we should try to more, rather than competing'). There are frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'most of the people think'), and missing prepositions or articles. These numerous structural flaws frequently distort meaning and impede communication, reflecting the descriptors for Band 4.
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