Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is often argued by some people competed each other in educational and work in daily life is benefit for motivation. Meanwhile, others argue that help each other is better than competing each other for financial help. However, I believe that help each other is better for society.

One the one hand, supporters of the idea that competition at work, at school and in daily life believe that it help for motivation. As they competing the other so they have motivation of the success.

Take an example, recently a competition held in China, every participant was motivative and work hard for success. Thus, the supporters of this view support their finding back their analysis with valid arguments.

While on the other hand, the advocates of the view that cooperate is better than competing believe that it was helpful in financially in future. As they need money in future so everyone happily help him. Take an example, a survey conduct in China and everyone said help each other is better than competing. Hence, this view also seems to carry a lot weightage.

However, I believe that cooperate is better than competing for society. As help each other developed positive thinking for everyone. Thus, this was also leading positive advantage of this thing.

To sum up, even though competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing, but I believe that in term of financial help and society cooperate with each other is better than competing each other.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both the views that competition is beneficial and that cooperation is preferable, while also providing a clear personal opinion. However, the ideas are relatively basic and under-developed. For instance, the arguments regarding motivation and financial help are supported by vague examples, such as "recently a competition held in China" and "a survey conduct in China," which lack specific detail or deep elaboration. Furthermore, some of the reasoning is repetitive. According to the Band 5 descriptors, the response addresses the task and presents a position, but the ideas remain somewhat limited and under-developed, warranting a Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, attempting to follow a standard argumentative structure with an introduction, body paragraphs for each view, a personal opinion paragraph, and a conclusion. However, the overall progression is weakened by repetitive phrasing and a lack of smooth transitions. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and often inaccurately, such as "One the one hand" and "While on the other hand." Referencing is also sometimes unclear, creating a disjointed reading experience. These features align closely with the Band 5 descriptor, which notes some organization but a lack of clear overall progression, alongside inadequate or inaccurate cohesive devices.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently reusing words like "competing," "help," "cooperate," and "society" throughout the text. There are numerous word-choice and collocation errors, such as "competed each other" instead of "competing with each other," "benefit for motivation" instead of "beneficial for motivation," and "carry a lot weightage" instead of "carry a lot of weight." The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for conveying simple ideas, but noticeable errors cause some difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 5 criteria.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and basic clauses. Attempts at complex sentences are almost uniformly faulty, featuring frequent grammatical errors such as missing auxiliary verbs, incorrect verb forms ("motivative" instead of "motivated", "survey conduct" instead of "survey conducted"), and persistent preposition errors. These frequent errors cause strain for the reader and impede comprehension in several places, which is characteristic of the Band 4 descriptor.

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