Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this world there are a huge competition in every sector , everyone wants to get a good job in their work life , everybody wants to be frist in their school . there are a debet wheras some believes that compettition is a good sign where others believe we should cooperate more rather than against each other . in this essay i will discuss both views and i will give a opinion .

on the one hand, in this modern days everthing going to be hard . everyone wants to be the frist there are a lot of competition in every sectors . AT work sector everyone wants promotion that is why they always do good job because when you get promotion you will get high salary then before for this reason everybody do there best . in the case of study every students fight for get good result and at the end everyone gets good marks . when you are in competition you have a consistant mind and you try your best get win .

on the other hand, when it comes to cooperate , everyone takes is easy. then they do not want to give their best . they always think some will do their work . it gives a person less consistent , not focus on their work , and get loss all time . that is why you should stay in a competition . so that you can concentrate on your works

from my veiw i always prefer stay in a competiton because of it will make you a consistant person also you always want to success moreover you will get good result

to sum up we should try to competition rather than cooperate more because it will give you proper concerntrate person and you will get success in your life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to discuss both views on competition versus cooperation and gives a personal opinion, thereby covering all parts of the task as required by the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat superficial. For instance, the student states in the body paragraph that at work 'everyone wants promotion that is why they always do good job', but this point is not fully extended or supported with deeper reasoning or concrete examples. Similarly, the cooperative view is dismissed rather briefly without exploring potential benefits like teamwork or collective problem-solving. The position is clear throughout, but the over-simplification of arguments places this essay at the lower end of the task-oriented spectrum, aligning best with Band 5 descriptors where ideas are somewhat under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay uses basic paragraphing to separate the introduction, two body paragraphs, the writer's opinion, and a conclusion. However, the overall organization lacks smooth progression and logical transitions between ideas. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, or inaccurate, such as starting sentences with 'on the one hand', 'on the other hand', and 'from my veiw' without always establishing clear logical relationships. Referencing is sometimes confusing, as seen in sentences like 'it gives a person less consistent , not focus on their work , and get loss all time'. The lack of sophisticated transition markers and the mechanical nature of the cohesive links reflect the characteristics of a Band 5 performance.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on everyday words such as 'good', 'job', 'work', and 'competition'. There are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, including 'frist' for first, 'debet' for debate, 'wheras' for whereas, 'compettition', 'everthing', 'sectors', 'consistant' for consistent, and 'concerntrate'. These errors and the limited lexical range mean the vocabulary is only minimally adequate for the task. The frequent inaccuracies in spelling and word formation occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, fitting firmly into the Band 4 to Band 5 range, leaning towards a 5 for communicative intent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The student uses a mix of simple sentences and attempts at complex forms, but these attempts are frequently marred by basic grammatical and punctuation errors. Examples include run-on sentences with comma splices, such as 'everyone wants to get a good job in their work life , everybody wants to be frist in their school', and missing auxiliary verbs or incorrect verb forms like 'everthing going to be hard' and 'everybody do there best'. Punctuation is inconsistent, with spaces frequently placed before commas and periods. Due to the high frequency of grammatical errors and inaccurate sentence structures that sometimes impede smooth reading, this performance corresponds to Band 4.

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